Very good start.

gunny

Very nice description of the battle. You have a great writing skill and a thorough understanding how the machines work and battle each other. It makes such an enjoyable read.

wow! this is pretty good,it is a project worth continuing! keep up the good work! the dialogue could use a little work,but a little polish only.

Again, excellent work. Love the characterization of a washed-up mercenary who can't keep away from battle. I love this kind of internal conflict, tortured soul, self denial. It makes a very interesting read.

Hmm... wow, great read! The battle scene is very well choreographed. The details are mind blowing. Good start! I'm eager to read more.