nice story

I think the story was pretty awesome and I like the way it flows. I enjoyed the "battle" between Luke and Carrie and I liked the twist of Carrie being Jane.
I just wanted to point out two things and I hope you won't take this the wrong way, but the ending with the little summaries into the future felt a bit rushed. Also, I think your story would get even more readers if you could take someone to read it before you posted it and maybe suggest a few changes in the text, because it is a bit rough and the idea might get a bit lost sometimes.
Overall, it was a good story and I hope to hear more from you! Keep on writing!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Yea! I've been wanting to red more stories about Jane/Deb. Really good first chapter. Please continue ASAP!