I really like this so far and think you've got a great idea with plenty of potential. However, there are a few things that can be off-putting to potential reader/reviewers. The story is a wall of text split into two paragraphs, which is hard to read. I had to struggle a little to get through the first few sentences.

When somebody new talks, there should be a new paragraph, and when you introduce a new thought or idea. This would make everything a lot easier to read.

However, I really like where this is going, and you're a good writer. I want to know what's wrong with Bird soon!

Yay! Bird stories love it!

Please update soon

well done good update soon cant wait to see where you going with this

Love this story & where it is heading!

Please update soon, would like to find out what happens!