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| ??? 2008-05-10 ch 6, anon. | abuseCheck out an anime called hellsing. its awesome |
| TwlightDevil-of-the-Night 2008-02-24 ch 2,  | abuseO.o OMG... |
| deitarion/SSokolow 2007-03-05 ch 6, | abuseExcellent fic. Thanks a million. |
| Flash69 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abuse"I associate Victorian England and England in general with vampires" Well, both see roughly the same amount of sunlight I suppose... Sigh... |
| Scygnus Darkhawk 2005-09-15 ch 6, | abuseHm... very nice. I congradulate you on coming up with this idea(I believe), though I see a few problems, this is a very good fic. Now, onto being critical... I felt the action was a bit oddly paced, or perhaps it's the way you wrote it... I'm not sure. Also, while I have nothing against Deus Ex Machina, you made it far far too obvious, and rushed right past the details. Also, unless he was seen far far earlier and has been a mysterious figure for a while, God NEVER admits who he is; it may be implied or directly guessed by the characters, but he never comes right out and says it so blatantly. Makes the total Deus Ex Machina so much worse. I liked the beginning and the middle of this fic, but the ending fails to reach the same level, I think. Though I've no room to talk about endings, seeing as I haven't managed to write one yet. Good work, and I hope to see more. |
| narocroc 2004-12-05 ch 3, anon. | abuse"A man never stands as tall as when he kneels to help a child." That is the best quote I've ever seen in a fanfic. Words can't explain how true that saying is. Back to the story... This is a great fic, using the much better Kuei-jin over the stereotypical Transylvanian vampire. The ending semmed a bit rushed, though, with Keitaro magically returning to normal without explination. Other than that, keep on writing. I hope someday my skills will be on par with yours. Ja ne! |
| Tanachi 2004-06-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery Good! I enjoyed every bit of this fic. Your wording was good...good action...long writing, and A nice ending! I've got to say my man...got to give you your props! |
| Tanachi 2004-06-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery Good! I enjoyed every bit of this fic. Your wording was good...good action...long writing, and A nice ending! I've got to say my man...got to give you your props! |
| Knight's Shadow 2004-05-14 ch 6, anon. | abuseNo one ever suspects the old preiste until it's to late.Bad Karma indeed. A truley awesome story. Peace. |
| Skuld's Sentaro 2004-04-24 ch 6, | abuseVery interesting story, hope you create another love hina story as good as this... |
| Ashura3 2003-01-04 ch 6, | abuseVery very well done. This is the best written Love Hina fic i'v read. |
| Scott 2002-12-19 ch 6, anon. | abuseThis is a pretty good story, interesting in parts. Naru has been pretty annoying so far though, and normally I like her. I'd give it a six or seven out of ten. The main detraction was the way Naru kept involving herself in the action for no reason. It sort of grated on me. |
| NagoyaX 2002-09-05 ch 1, | abuseits a good story, i keep up to it alot.. bu ti think that the ending leaves somehting to be desired! |
| NagoyaX 2002-09-05 ch 1, | abuseits a good story, i keep up to it alot.. bu ti think that the ending leaves somehting to be desired! |
| Duran the Warrior 2002-09-01 ch 6, | abusenice story |