|Reviews for Persona:The conclusion|
| Shimmer Stream 10/5/12 . chapter 5
Name: Tenrai Orimura
Personality: A hardworking with a desire to be above average with an unbelievable habit of being helpful has earned him the admiration of both peers and adults alike. As the Captain of the basketball team, he is stern but only because he wants the team to succeed. This has earned him the loyalty of the Basketball Club and it's supporters. He is very vocal in his encouragement.
Availability during the week: Monday through Friday and sometimes Saturday depending if he has plans or not. Sundays are what he calls 'Halcyon Days,' meaning Sundays are his days off.
Availability during day: He takes Day classes in preparation for higher education and to get into good colleges. However, since it is not his main education, it is fairly easy for him to be available.
Availability during afternoons: His afternoons either consists of him drilling the basketball team or relaxing so getting his attention is easy.
Availability during nights: he is hyper focused on his studies so getting his attention is insanely difficult. People are better off waiting till after school.
Appearance: Standing at a solid 6 foot and with an athlete's body has earned him the envy of many males and the hearts of many females ( and some males to his dismay.) His blond hair and yellow eyes gives him the look of a foreigner, which only excites his fans even more.
Strengths: Physical, Status Ailments
Style of fighting: Swift in attacking with his spear and brutal in giving enemies status ailments make him one feelings fighter. He only ever uses his Persona when training or in need.
Initial Persona: Heimdoll, the Everwatch
Appearance: A pale skinned male clad in an intimidating black armor and carrying a solid steel spear that somehow exuded power. He stands at six feet, has a body befitting a powerful warrior, has pointed ears, long red hair, and golden eyes.
Resolution to unlock final persona: Has to recognize that with or without his help, people will still accomplish their goals.
Evolved Persona: Shinryuu, Divine Dragon
Appearance: A powerful dragon with a humanoid upper body and a serpent-like lower body. It is a mile long with a wingspan of half a mile and is covered in pure white scales.
Personality: Arrogance in its power
Condition to unlock True Final Persona: Recognizes that though he can achieve a lot on his own, with others, he can achieve more. He resolves to ask for help from his peers though it is hard for him since he has only depended on himself for so long.
True Final Persona: Gaia, The True Mother
Personality: Stern and Kind
Appearance: A beautiful woman with long blue hair and green eyes that exudes a green mist. She stands at five feet and eight inches and has the body of perfection. She wears a white toga that ends at the middle of her thighs, brown strap sandals reminiscent of those worn by Ancient Greeks, a brown shoulder guard embroidered with green vines branching out, and carrying an intricate long sword.
History: An above average student and a talented basketball player, he is considered an ideal by many and has the respect of both adults and peers alike because of his unexpected helpfulness. This helpfulness along with his strive to the top actually came about because of his deadbeat father. Vowing not to be like him and to support his mother who works hard to provide for them both. What most don't realize is that his helpfulness is actually a selfish desire. This desire came from his hatred of his father's laziness. It was only in junior high when he joined his school's basketball club that his goal and his desire intensified. Now he is the Captain of the Basketball Club and has the support of it and its supporters.
Interest: Has a surprising affinity for cooking and gardening. He has an interest in automobiles after helping a friend fix his car. His love for basketball is well known.
How they acquired the Evoker: After a game in which he had helped a teammate acquire the game point, he found an Evoker in the locker where he had put his bag.
How did they discover their potential the first time round: Walking home after the celebration for winning the Basketball Winter and Summer Cups, he is caught off guard by the Dark Hour. Confused, he is attacked by a Shadow. Frightened of dying at the hands of the shadow, he decided to kill himself instead by shooting the Evoker at himself, not knowing that it wasn't a real gun. This will forever change his life.
| Shimmer Stream 10/5/12 . chapter 1
You know, it's true that this is a good story. So I think it's a waste to just give up on it. Newcomers to Persona like me need stories like these or else we'll lose interest fast. Please don't give up on this story.
As for the OC, I'm new to Persona so I'm still doing some research. I don't know what The impact Arcana has on things nor do I know the significance of a Persona. However, I am interested in submitting an OC. So if someone could explain those to me, I would appreciate it. The Persona wikia doesn't really help me. I looked for the Personas of some of the OCs and came up blank. Were those OC personas?
| tashaj4de 8/28/12 . chapter 5
WHY IS THIS THE LAST CHAPTEEEEEEER!?
MAKE MORE PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAS E!
I wanna know what she's going to tell him TT
| tashaj4de 8/27/12 . chapter 3
Finally. managed. to finish this!
ok, next chappie
| DemonRaily 8/22/12 . chapter 4
Well, taking OC's from othes is never a good thing in the first place, it never is. Just saying...
| tashaj4de 8/20/12 . chapter 2
*read reviews before story* You're going to end this? I don't think so!
This story's too good to be ended, but that's my opinion. I haven't even reached the 2nd chapter yet owo
...Anyway, Demon's the one that brought me here... and WHY THE HECK DIDN'T I READ THIS BEFORE?!
Ok now... why is it this has too little reviews? MUST NEED MORRRREEEEE!
Ok, review time. ranting over - .-
So, he's not a Wild Card, he's ten years old, and he looks feminine? Interesting. Alot of OC stories have a Wild Card as the main character. I'm glad I'm not the only one who uses someone who isn't a Wild Card as the Main Character.
...The 10 year old kid from seven years ago... I can only think of Ken XD
DON'T END THIS!
Ok, back to reading
| Unfufilled 8/20/12 . chapter 5
Aw, don't end the story! I really enjoy reading it and the characters are all diverse and interesting because they don't come from a single source, the flow of the story is great and the chapters are nice and long! Like I said, I really like the story!
| Demons Anarchy 8/20/12 . chapter 5
Which one are you referring to? Kaguya or Seichi? And, dude, don't quit now! Seriously, are you really gonna give up? Dude, you do awesome jobs on these chapters! Seriously man, don't quit! Just ask me whatever questions through the review sheet, so, DON'T QUIT MAN!
| Hades Revolution 8/6/12 . chapter 1
Oky-doky! Here it is for Namikaze!
weapon: sniper rifle, long rage fires like there's no tommorrow, and in close range, he swings it around like a bat
Condition to unlock true final persona: after seeing that Kita wanted him to kill him he begins to investigate why the reason was, along with the protagonist. After scrounging around in his parents study, the two find a diary which belonged to Kita himself. Each page was filled how he tried to make Namikaze into someone who would be proud to call the Hotsuin family's heir, but couldn't do to the fact that he was under too much pressure. After Kulin's death, Kita was upset with himself that he couldn't be there to stop the yakuza. At the last page, Kita had wanted to see for himself how much Namikaze had grown, and the last line said, "I hope you can truly be happy, Nami." After reading it all, Nami is filled with tears, and swears that he will inherit the Hotsuin estate, and be someone truly worthy of the name. Doing so will awaken his true Persona.
True Persona: Nylarathotep, the God of Identity
-appearance: though appeared to be inherited from his brother, he has a different form. He wears a black buisness like suit, black slacks, black leather shoes, a black buisness jacket showing some of a red buttoned up shirt with a black tie, his hair is black, reaching his neck, but is tied in a pony-tail, giving a resemblance to Kita Hotsuin, however, his face is covered up by a white drama mask with a curved smile, expressionless white eyes, and a red butterfly like pattern on the left side of the mask itself. His hands are also in black gloves, his left is in his slacks' pocket, while the right holds up the mask.
personality: clever, cold, aristocratic
I hope that works well for you senpai! I look forward to seeing this updated! And remember, 's long as I am here, there is no way in hell I am gonna let you quit this story!
| KO 8/6/12 . chapter 1
Okay, here is the new character.
Name: Kyosuke Hirona
Personality: ponders what life is about, and is always calm, even in the most fearing situation. When he is around Kanai, however, he often acts like a complete idiot, trying his best not to let her recognize him.
He is available all week on the mornings, afternoons, and nights.
Appearance: purple and blue hair that covers his ears and the sides of his face, has diamond blue eyes, and wears a purplish blue winter jacket with a hood, a black t-shirt underneath, and a pair of red shorts coming down to his kneecaps. Also wears black and white shoes.
Strengths: Light, Darkness, Physical
Weakness: Ice, Lightning
style of fighting: he is mostly laid back and prefers kick boxing
Initial Persona: Alexander the Great
-appearance: has golden curly chin length hair, closed eyes, and wears a golden breastplate, golden greaves and pauldrons, leather brown braces around his wrists, and has a golden broadsword reaching to his neck in length in both hands
Resolution to unlock Ultimate Persona: even though he can't tell his sister who he is, he still wants to watch over her, until she is ready to look after herself, and is willing to go into harms way to help her
Ultimate Persona: Lancelot the Undying
-appearance: wears armor similar to the knight class in Demon Souls, except wields two swords in both hands
Condition to unlock true final Persona: upon seeing that Kanai has matured enough, he tells her who he is, and is shocked by the fact that Kanai had already known who he really was, and makes him promise that he never leave her again, which he promises, and asks that the protagonist help him look after her
3rd Tier Persona: Romulus the Almighty
-appearance: has brown unkempt hair going down to his shoulder blades, red eyes, and wears a roman legionary outfit, except without any weapons or a helmet, his left hand is on his hip, and he looks like a 17 year old. By his side is a white wolf with golden eyes. During magic and physical attacks, the wolfs act when Romulus raises hand and points at his target. The wolf, for physical attacks, charges at the enemy, and during magic casting, it howls.
History: Kanai's supposedly deceased brother. Somehow he survived, and has been living on his own, but when he found his sister, he saw that she had been traumatized by his disappearance, and has kept a watch on her ever since, looking at her from a distance, but has longed to one day tell her his identity. When she asks him for his name, he answers Kyosuke Nagase, seeing as how he can't tell her his real last name.
Interests: the protagonists preferances in girls, and likes reading murder mystery novels, one of which is the Sherlock Holes series, written by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle.
How they acquired the evoker: when he awoke in an abandoned hospital facility, he found an evoker by his bed side, except the letters S.E.E.S. were scratched out
How did they discover their potential the first time round: when the ark Hour occured, a Shadow, ironically the Reaper, had appeared and to kill Kyosuke. However, during his escape, he felt something tugging at him, telling him to use the gun. When he summoned Alexander the Great, it wounded the Reaper severelly, making it retreat. Ever since, Kyosuke had wondered where the power of Persona had came from.
Well, that's my new character. Please, update soon senpai
| Demons Anarchy 8/6/12 . chapter 2
Oh crap, that's right! Seichi is available all week on the afternoons while Kaguya is only available on Friday!
Update soon senpai!
| KO 8/6/12 . chapter 1
Okay, I kind of had a few problems figuring it out, but here it is.
Here is Shino's.
style of fighting: uses a combat knife held in a underhand fashion, and will swipe at the enemy and often try to impale their heads.
condition to unlock final persona: After coming to terms with himself, as well as opening himself up toe the others, he finally see's what is truly important, not only the protagonist, but also his friends as well.
True Final Persona: Izanagi-no-Mikoto, the Prince of Takamagahara
appearance: similar to his appearance in the Persona 4 franchise, except he no longer wears a mask, showing jet black hair reaching to his neck, yellow cold eyes, and his mouth is covered by the muffler. His combat knife is replaced by a spear
personality: gentle, sad, optimistic
And now Kanai
style of fighting: uses an axe, though she can only swing it in one direction.
condition to unlock final Persona: once she realizes how important friendship can be, she opens herself up more and more, and swears that she will one day become someone worthy of Shino
True Final Persona: Eve, the Faithful
appearance: has golden hair that goes to the mid-section of her back, her eyes are always closed, and has golden bracelets, each with a white salvia flower. She also wears a white dress that goes down to her ankles, and resembles a night gown, except without sleeves.
personality: kind, gentle
Kanai and Shino are both available on sundays and mondays during the afternoons. Anyway, update soon.
| Demons Anarchy 7/29/12 . chapter 1
Hm, yeah sure. Alright then.
Weapon: metal bat
style of fighting: acts like it's an actual sword, so he fights like Souji Seta/Yu Narukami
condition to unlock final Persona: When he see's that he can do more than just aid those in need, Seichi see's how important friends are, and will help the protagonist with whatever help he may need.
True Final Persona: Metatron, the Heavenly Host
Personality: Haughty, Gentle, Understanding
Appearance: looks like in the SMT games, example is the Persona series. Metalic silverish white body with large wings, mismatched green and blue eyes, light brown hair, and a gold and white toga or robe.
style of fighting: think Akihiko, except more agressive, such as pounding away at the enemy like Kanji in P4: Arena.
condition to unlock final Persona: see's how important friends can be, and with the help of the others, begins to open up, and swears he will do anything to fight for what he believes in.
True Final Persona: Susano-O
personality: furious, gentle, haughty
appearance: similar to Yosuke's version, except he is cross legged like he normally is, and instead of a saw blade, has the Totsuke Blade at his side, as well as several others
Well, that's it. Update soon!
| Demons Anarchy 7/27/12 . chapter 1
Hate to tell you thisWindraider-senpai, but, now that Hades has joined in. Well...
You should be ready to expect some complaints for saying that you might scrap the story.
| Hades Revolution 7/26/12 . chapter 1
Oooh, I like how this story is! But, why do wanna give up on it so soon? Unfortunately for you missy, when Revolutionary of Hades is here, THAT AIN'T GONNA HAPPEN!
Name: Namikaze Hotsuin, also goes by the nickname Nami-kun, since he hates his full name
Personality: he is out-spoken and can often cause problems. He can't cook, and is the often expected to do something good from his brother. However, he values his friends over everything, and he will do anything to protect them. Even if it meant to kill someone.
Time of availibility: he is free for monday and sunday nights, but all through out the day, he is free all week
Appearance: has whitish gray hair that goes behind his ears, covers the sides of his face, and has almond brown eyes. He always has a lop-sided smile, even in a difficult situation. He wears a white "V" neck shirt with a jet black jacket that has three thin yellow lines going down it's sleeves, and blue slacks with black dress shoes. However, when his brother is around, his smile turns into a scowl.
Arcana: Hanged Man
Initial Persona: Attis, god of reincarnation-his appearance is the same as with the Persona series, blue skin with brown linen bandages all wrapped around his body with a dagger in hand.
Resolution to unlock final Persona: with the help of the protagonist, he fights his brother, telling him that he can do whatever his heart desires.
Ultimate Persona: Asura, King of Gods-his appearance has fiery red hair that goes to his shoulders, normal skin, has closed eyes, golden gauntlets that stop at his forearm, golden greaves that end at his calf's, blood red attire that covers his lower torso, he also has gold rings around his gauntlets, covered in fire.
History: younger brother to Kita Hotsuin, as well as the hated child in the family. He would often run away from his house, where his butler, Kulin, would search for him from dusk till dawn. When Kulin died at the hands of a yakuza, Namikaze grew to hate the world and wore a care-free mask, but with it came a hatred that was aimed at his brother, blaming him for the incident, since that was when Kita had not aided Kulin in his search that day.
Interests: music and art
How did they acquire the evoker: found it in the hands of his butler, who was taking his last breath. His last words were: "young master, with this, you can truly aid those who are in need of your help..."
How did they discover their potential the first time round: when the yakuza member aimed his gun at Namikaze, he felt so much hatred that he used the evoker right then and there, and killed the yakuza out of anger. Ever since, he vowed that he would protect those he cared for that he had left.
I hope you like him! Also, I have an antagonist guy if you wanna use him!
Name: Kita Hotsuin
personality: outside, he is a conceited jerk who will use anyone to get what he wants. Inside, he is an overprotective brother that wants what is best for his little sibling.
Appearance: blonde hair that is tied in a pony-tail, blue eyes, a red buttoned shirt with a yellow blazor that has a black line going down each sleeve, bearing a resemblance to Namikaze's jacket. He also wears black slacks with brown leather shoes. He also wears fingerless black gloves.
Persona: Nylarathotep, God of Chaos and Identity-has a humanoid jet black body with red demon wings, a faceless human head with golden curly hair that ends at the shoulders, golden gauntlets and greaves at his arms and legs, ending at the calf's and forearm, also has a long tale circling his body.
History: older brother to Namikaze Hotsuin, as well as the heir to the Hotsuin estate. He could never tell his younger sibling how he felt, and when Namikaze bore a hatred towards him, he was determined to make Namikaze into something, so he planted seeds of hatred in him by molding himself a jackass of a personality. When Namikaze faces his brother, he has a peaceful smile as he summons Ashura, and tell's him that it's high time for the flowers of destiny to bloom. After the battle, he asks the protagonist to take good care of his brother, and dies with a happy smile.
How did they acquired the evoker: found it in his parents study when he decided to clean it up with Namikaze.
How did they discover their potential the first time round: when the Dark Hour emerged, he ventured into Tartarus with his curiousity peaked, and summoned his Persona when the Reaper attacked him. Nylarathotep disposed of him quite easily, and thinks he can use this power to help Namikaze realize his true potential.
Anyway, there is no way in HELL that I am gonna let you have this story go unfinished, so DON'T EVEN THINK ABOUT IT BUSTER!