|Reviews for New Kid|
| Cores 3/30/13 . chapter 12
Im not disappointed . This chapter is wonderful like the rest of the fic . Follow , please
| fanfictionlover47 3/28/13 . chapter 12
Awwwwwwwwwww...MMMMARTINNN! He acts so cute with Danny and they're snuggling! I loved this chapter very much! :)
| Guest 3/28/13 . chapter 12
| Guest 3/5/13 . chapter 1
| Cores 12/23/12 . chapter 11
Great chapter! . Martins point of view could be interesting . I like the guys of the new school .
| Cores 12/2/12 . chapter 10
Very good chapter . I missed this fic .
| Cores 9/18/12 . chapter 9
Good chapter . I miss read this story . I like Martin hitting Tobias to defend Danny and I knew that Martins father couldnt be beating him . It simply doesnt fit .
| Cores 8/11/12 . chapter 8
Great chapter. I love the support of Rafi , first with Dannys sexuality and later with Martin .
| Cores 8/2/12 . chapter 7
Wonderful chapter . Romantic and emotive relationship. I like that Danny go out with Martin .
| xxcmpunks-secret-loverxx 8/1/12 . chapter 1
| Guest 7/23/12 . chapter 6
Its a good chapter .Its a intriguing fic , follow , please.
| Guest 7/17/12 . chapter 5
I like the introduction of Rafi . Its very interesting the relation between Danny and his brother when he is a teenager . I loved it.
PD: Im not the anonymous reader what spoke about the theme of Deputy Director. Her name is Katy
| Guest 7/13/12 . chapter 4
Interesting bakground on Martin . I liked this chapter .
| Cathy 7/12/12 . chapter 4
All of your stories have great potential, but you need to proof-read and edit your stories before posting them. You have lots of spelling errors that won't get picked up a spell-checker because it's not a case of the word being spelled wrong, but that you're using the wrong word (for instance, back in one of the chapters you wrote 'convince store' when you meant 'convenience store'). You drop words, which are probably happening because you started to write one thing in the sentence and then changed your mind.
For an AU fic, it would help if you mentioned what makes it AU. For instance, in this one you have Martin and Danny as teens. Is this supposed to be an AU that happens prior to the show - or have no relevance at all to the show? Is it set in present time versus them as teens based on their ages in the show? You should do a little bit of research into the F.B.I. and how it functions. For instance, the Director of the F.B.I. is never an agent, but is a political appointee put in that position by the President of the United States. The Deputy Director is never promoted to that position. Deputy Director of the entire F.B.I. is the highest position an agent can ever achieve, and it's a position that is only reached after years of hard work. In other words, if you're writing a story that's happening during the time frame of the show, you shouldn't have Martin remembering his father being the Deputy Director back when he was a teen because that wouldn't have happened. Victor would have held another position at that time. There are also limits as to how old you have to be before you can apply to the F.B.I., and an upper limit on age, too. There are books in the library that can give you those kinds of details and more.
| Guest 7/12/12 . chapter 4