Now that's just plain mean. :(
I actually enjoyed the story! :D
I can't wait until you decide to update! :)
Who cares about one person's complaint(meaning the review up there):P
I think the story was great! Or going great! :D can't wait for what you have in store!

Well that first review is just plain mean!
I actually enjoyed the story :)
I was a bit disappointed when there wasn't a second chapter. I hope you'll get the motivation to continue writing! So it was one person that complains, they shoulda left their negative comments to themselves. I like your characters, plot, and the details. :)
I hope you'll continue writing! ;D

This story is an atrocity and you should feel horrible for writing it. The fact that you're desecrating Otoyomegatari with this crime against the English language just makes it even worse. Well, desecrating the placeholder section for Otoyomegatari, since this pile of trash you wrote doesn't actually seem to have anything at all to do with it. Thank god for small favors, I suppose.

Anyway, please wait at least a decade before trying to write again, and for the love of all that's good and pure read something that isn't Twilight or Fifty Shades of Grey during that time. You might actually learn what competent writing looks like that way.