One tip I would give you is to use a normal format opposed to this, what I would call,a"crack story format ". Other than that I enjoyed reading this.

Boo!

this was a short chapter

Sonic speeds up and goes faster than the plane. Sorry I couldn't resist

wow,plz continued and ive seen some dragonball reference. again plz continued

lol a over 9000 meme. also answer this question? try to spell muk backwards? if you have the answer post right now.

Step 1: Use proper gammar. This fanfiction is hard to read in the state it is in.

Step 2: Be more sparse with the fourth wall abuse. This isn't a Deadpool fanfiction.

Step 3:Use less memes. Self explanatory.

Step 4: Be descriptive. Give descriptions of the characters and locations and at least try to show transition.

Step 5:Try to lengthen your chapters.

That is all.

try making the chapters longer

why wont anybody give reviews please