its chapter 4 not 3

Seems like a great story, can't wait for the other chapters.

I did find one inconsistency, but it's minor. (E.G. louie calls the whites away from being eaten 10 days before they enter the White flower Garden.)
This is another good chapter! Don't worry, I'm inconsistent with my updates too.

I'm glad to see that you're writing again. I like the story thus far. There are a few run-on sentences and a couple grammar issues, but they don't really affect the flow of the story over all. Keep up the good work!

any chance of a translation for those of us who are too busy (read: lazy) to look them up?
Great story!

Don't worry, until you recover the debt after learning about all the pikmin there is NO PLOT WHATSOEVER. (along with the five types stored in your ship and the onions, there's a secret sixth type.)

Uh, can you please translate? I don't know any Latin. But other than that, I love the story.

I loved it. I'm looking forward to seeing this continued.

Tips? Well, not any a the moment. A few of your numbers are off, though. In Pikmin 2 you get 20 red pikmin on the first day, and eleven total from the onion. The 5 pikmin that Olimar had defeaed a dwarf red bulborb, makes four pikmin. 20 pikmin in I like it. _ Post the next chapter soon! Pwease?

Ooooh. Nice parody. I did a little pikmin crossover parody. Actually, am doing. It is a little hard to follow in the beginning, but I think I di... adequately. There are alot of characters. And a few of my own. Anyway, I already like the turn this story has taken. Cannot wait!
Master of Dimensions, Lichylichy.

Um...Do you have the NTSC or PAL version oof Pikmin2? 'Cuz some of the details you mentioned don't match mine.
Olimar and Louie seem rather jumpy...

G.M.- Hey, this looks promising! Keep it up! My only complaint is a slight grammar issue. Y'know, 'has' instead of 'have', that kinda stuff. Can't wait for an update! Kudos, and keep writing!

Ah! It's such an amazing start! It makes me courious and OH YES! A FEMALE OC IN PIKMIN 2! You know, that makes me really excited! Allowed to leave a tip? Spell and grammar check, I type hastily sometimes too and you missed some characters or words. Another thing is that it's short, but it's a prologue after all! I hope to see more soon!