|Reviews for A Hidden Warrior|
| Eternal Insight 11/9/12 . chapter 1
First of all, TOLSpyrogirl, shut up. Everybody does it and if you haven't got that through your head hten check other stories all over . Secondly, Damnit. I was really hoping for a continuation and you dashed my hopes. Thank you for being kind enough to let us know that you had discontinued it. *looks at TLOSpyrogirl, daring her to say something in opposition* Third and finally, your old stories (well, the first one) were fantastic and I have no idea why you deleted them. I like the idea of Spyro not being with Cynder for once, and I'm saddened at the loss of one of the few SpyroxOC stories out there. Once again, thank you for letting us know about the discontinuation and I'm looking forward to the next story.
May the ancestors watch over you.
| TLOSpyrogirl 11/5/12 . chapter 17
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| Dragon.Of.Chaos97 9/26/12 . chapter 16
Why don't you improve on the OC/Flame situation?
| Eternal Insight 9/19/12 . chapter 16
Update update update update update update PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAASSS EEE! Your stories are pure awesomesauce, so I am SERIOUSLY wanting it to be updated. TY for the story!
(P.S: your stories have almost no grammar errors at all, so don't beat yourself up for it.)
| SilverDragon2891 8/21/12 . chapter 15
great chapter and you were right that there are a few grammar errors in here i think only 2.
second of all Voldemort does technically have nostrils, they are like a snakes so no i don't think of him when i picture sparx since sparx doesn't even have those ;)
oh and your welcome :)
I was really happy that she got her book back (personally i would have attempted to kill those 2 if they even thought of trying to take one of my books; yes i know its a slight overreaction, but i am highly protective of my books. my brother accidently got a few greasy finger prints on one of the pages of one of my books once and i tried to beat the crap out of him; lucky for him my parents intervened if there is one thing in this world that you should never do it is mess with my books. but enough about me.)
anyway i can't wait for the next chapter and i hope that your starting to like this story again.
| SilverDragon2891 8/18/12 . chapter 14
I like that you decided to use other guardians instead of terrador, voltier, and cyral.
this was a good chapter I really was not expecting them to take her book. thats just horrible, quite frankly i would have probably gone berserk if i were in Eritess' scales.
I did find a few spelling/grammar errors in your story.
anyway i can't wait for the next chapter and since schools is about to start i want to say please post a new chapter soon but i doubt that will happen until the weekend. so as soon as possible please get the next chapter up. i want to see what happens next. (I know i am rather impatient)
| Eclipse the Dragonoid 8/18/12 . chapter 14
i think i know JUST what she's doing,
of one of the rarest books in (your fanfiction's) the (spyro) world
| SilverDragon2891 8/11/12 . chapter 13
I like that you gave Flame a back-story. a lot of people don't give characters like him one and so it is refreshing when it happens.
I'm not sure if you or anyone else considers this a cliff hanger, but i do!
why must you be so mean to me? T_T
anyway I am glad that you have decided to continue the story and i can't wait for the next chapter. (please hurry cliff hangers are scary. lol)
| stormeclpsdragon 8/3/12 . chapter 12
im still annoyed about logging in on my ds... when i log in i just later get logged out even with remember me on...
1. i watch pink panther but i dont get the joke in last chapter
2. i still like the story
| Eclipse the Dragonoid 8/3/12 . chapter 10
i hate logging in...
if im not logged in my reviews will be by stormeclipsdragon, you'll likely figure it out
where's ducky? oh there he is!*points at sparx*
| SilverDragon2891 8/3/12 . chapter 12
It was a good chapter.
If you don't like the story anymore then you should scrap the project, it might make a few people mad but its better than writing something that you don't want to. that would make it feel like a chore and would take you even longer. you don't have to delete the story from your computer just take it down from fanfic; that way if you decide to continue the story you can just re-post it and continue from where you left off. I will say that i do like this story and would like for you to continue it, but i wont mind if you scrap it.
| wuffser 7/28/12 . chapter 4
I haven't finished this story yet (Just finished chapter 4). But I can say without a shadow of a doubt your story has one thing over countless mediocre fanfiction. Characterization. This issue has plagued many young writers. But you seem to have so far completely avoided many pitfalls. These characters are strong and I can see them clearly in my minds eye. Children act like children, adults adults. These characters have a history and they show it. And it makes me care. Even if the plot is (so far) fairly basic.
However it could use some more detail when describing something (Namely the five senses). And please take the time to use more colorful words in general. A words connotation and denotation can be used to your advantage. For example a guy who keeps speaking in ye old English would use "older" words than some lazy basement-dweller almost constantly spouting memes. This rule can also be applied to dialogue.
| SilverDragon2891 7/27/12 . chapter 11
ah awkward moment for Spyro and Cynder achieved! :)
It is turning from mission oblivious into a contest between Eritess and Flame/mission impossible (not really impossible)
i noticed a few spelling errors but no biggie. just change ground to group. there was another one but i can't remember what it was nor can i seem to find it again (oh well someone else will find it i am sure so no worries).
anyway this chapter turned out great. your really good at writing this romance stuff, although i am hoping to see more romantic/awkward moments between Flame and Eritess soon. cant wait for the next chapter please don't keep me in suspense for too long ;)
| SilverDragon2891 7/27/12 . chapter 10
Yea the mischief can finally start! XD
Great chapter by the way. although i have to wonder when will flame and eritess start to develop romantic feelings for each other? right now it seems more like they are just good friends. perhaps they will have an awkward moment and realize something, hmmmm...?
| SpyroxCynder Fan 7/27/12 . chapter 11
Aww Spyro and Cynder, theyre so cute. And Tyem isn't himself... Big evil one is somewhere... Great 2 chapters like whole story can't wait for more!