cool chapter, it seems out of character for Jack to run, and hide during a firefight

Jack got taken, this John character is becoming a major player, and really curious in what happens to Stephen. I like the format and the story. KEEP GOING!

Wow, pretty damn good man. its a real "page turner" if u will.

There are a lot of stories about 24 on here but this is one of the ones thats actually keeping my attention. I hope you continue

A little over the top in some areas but I'm really liking this story so far.

I like how you're making this similar to the real 24. 3 different subplots, the nice end-episode cliffhanger. really good

Just saw logo and thought I read it, its awesome dude! please keep writing!

First off, a good start BUT there really is NO NEED for the 'Previously 24' etc above the prologue! I mean, these type of things just tells me that: ONE, you want to UP your WORD count, so, in-turn, you do what you did with this so called 'chapter'..NO GOOD..

Or second, YOU do want the readers to remember what happen in the last days of 24; but I really doubt it..I mean, fans WILL remember what happened and ESP the C/J scene at the VERY END!

Great chapter

Such a great story man. Please continue this. I need too know what else happens. Kim's death turned out too be a murder, who's the woman that helped Stephan? and whats next for Jack and Agent Reese, Chloe and the AG. IM BEGGING YOU! CONTINUE THIS STORY!

Great story so far

I was looking for chapter 5 but it is not here! Please, write and post more of your story, I like it so much.
tommy

I'm sorry but I couldn't keep reading.
This is completely unrealistic. there's no way, no way, that the goverment asks for Jack's help after what he did at the end of day 8. People just don't get how serious what he did is. It drives me crazy. He killed the Russian foreign minister. That's not something people will let go, ever, just because they need him. The goverment HAS to either hand him to the Russians or put him in prison themselves. Otherwise, it'll be a terrible diplomatic disaster.
Besides, if Kim died Jack would go completely insane with grief. He lost his head after Renee Walker's death. He would completely lose it if his only daughter died. In your story, he doesn't seem to be even upset.

good story , congratulations, but it isnt complete,yet, isnt it?!
i want to read more! please !

Jack- "Back in ancient China, the Triads would cut their enemies one-thousand times before killing them. They would avoid cutting any major arteries so their victims couldn't die before they were finished."

"You've just experienced your first cut."

Damn Jack, lol