Please don't stop. I love this story. I really like how you wrote Pelagia. The fact that he's silent made the encounter really interesting since he had to express himself in other ways. Can't wait to see her meet some other Colossi too. Will Argus manage to be nice? What shall her reaction be when she finally meets Malus? I'm really intrigued. This is such an original storyline. Too many SoTC fics are just re-tellings of the game.

Wow, I really like this fic. Too many stories for this fandom are just retellings of the game but this one is different and original. I like stories which focus on the Colossi since they really are the best part of the game and I too think they aren't antagonistic by nature so I really like seeing them befriending a puny human. It's kind of... cute :D. I like how you have kept her reactions to them realistic and how she kind of is a total opposite to Wander.
I also like how the Colossi each have different personalities and different ways to approach her. The fact that they talk in this took some time getting used to but it doesn't really bother me. It was really interesting how Pelagia couldn't speak and had to express himself by other means. I liked that.
I'm intrigued how the other meetings will go. Especially Malus since he kind of seems to be closest thing to a leader. Well, perhaps not exactly a leader but he certainly seems the most knowledgeable. And while she has already met a bunch of Colossi, Malus is certainly a very impressive sight so I wonder if he'll just manage to scare the crap out of poor Lyna XD. I also wonder how Argus will deal with his... erm... attitude problem towards her or how you are going to write Gaius.
Please do write more. I'm fascinated by this story, It's refreshingly different.

Hm... I don't like the whole talking-Colossi thing; it seems to take away from their attribute of intimidation.
Again, your story - whatever floats your boat.

Wow, pretty decent. SotC is like a legend from my (and my brother's) childhood, and I'm glad someone's making a respect-worthy fanfiction of it.
Grammar and spelling seems fine, except that "kind of" is basically incorrect English. Try using "rather" instead.
Also, it seems uncharacteristic of Dormin to laugh, but whatever floats your boat.

Amazing! It must be pretty lonely for poor Pelagia. He is the stragest of all colossi. It was a cute chapter xD. Now what bother me is Dormin. What that fiend is planning to do? Thank you for the update!

Hi good story so far but your getting a few colossi wrong
Celosia is a tiger
Avion is a phoenix
Malus is a sorcerer
You got Dirge right he's a sand worm
(I will list the others)
Valus is a minotaur
Quadratus is a bull
Gaius is a knight
Phaedra is a horse
Barba is a bearded giant
Hydrus is a water serpent
Kuromori is a salamander
Basaran is a turtle
Pelagia is a sea monster
Phalanx is a dragon
Cenobia is a lion
Argus is a warrior
Hope this helps!

I just found this story
today and i love it!
Please update soon.

I am loving this story so far! I like stories where Colossi and humans have friendship. I don't always see them as hostile, in fact I like it more to think them as being good and gentle beings!

This is a very fun and creative take on the game. I love it! Can't wait for more. c:

I love this. Finally a creative fic and not just a retelling or something. Also, I love stories where the Colossi are portrayed as friendly. I don't think they are antagonistic in nature and were just defending themselves in the game. Though it's kinda weird that they talk in this but once I got used to it, it didn't bother me anymore. I like it how they each have different personalities.
Please make Lyna meet Malus. I think he would scare the crap out of her because he's so freaking huge XD. Btw I like it how you have kept Lyna more realistic in the way that she's still a bit scared around the Colossi. That's how any sensible human would act.
Please continue :)

Interesting take on the game.

To answer to you, Guest, I imagine they're speaking an ancient and dead language. To the people of this time, it's much like Latin is to us.
I just write it as English to make it an easier read, but they're speaking something much older than Wander's language from the game.

Awesome story! I have a question, when you write do you imagine them talking in the old language they speak in the game, or in English?

I like it so far. It's a bit weird seeing the Colossi talk, but I like the way they view people. I find Lyna interesting. She's somewhat the opposite of Wander; girl vs boy, white horse vs black horse, afraid of the Colossi vs killing them without mercy or hesitation. I'm curious to how the story will develop.
Why exactly is Dormin's dialogue bolded? To indicate a loud, ominous voice or something...?
I'm no native English speaker, so I could be entirely wrong about the technical stuff, but I have the feeling that at certain points in your story, you use a past simple when a perfect seems better fit. For example: "being nice, especially to humans, never was his strong point". I can't explain it; I just have the feeling that "had never been his strong point" fits better, so if I'm wrong, I'm sorry.
Anyway, good job and keep up!