Please update! I loved this! Oh my gosh, so good! Awesomeeee! LOVE!:D

Awee! This is so cute!:) I loved this! Which lost boys does she end up with? I hope david!:D

update soon.

Please update soon I can't wait to read the next chapter please hurry I really wanna know what happens next i love this :)

Omg please write more I've really got into this story pleaseeee ) you've got a good imagination )

hi, like it so far. please write more. tanks

This is seriously amazing! 3

Nice I really like it please hurry I really wanna know what happens next please update soon :)

brilliant! More soon please!

Okay, first thing's first. I like this, I've never really read a Lost Boys story like it before. But there are a few things you need to work on.

1. You're going so fast I don't really know what's going on. Take your time with it.

2. Your words are all jumbled together. I can't tell the beginning of one sentence from the end of another. You need to punctuate more.

3. You're too descriptive on certain things and not on others. Like her surroundings, not enough. Her clothing, too much. Her thoughts and emotions, not enough. Work on that.

4. Give us more of her backstory.

And lastly would you please give her some emotion and feeling? I can't really connect with her, she's kind of like a blank piece of paper, nothing's there.

I hope I helped, if I seem a little harsh I'm sorry! It's just that I try to treat people the way that I want to be treated.

Well good luck with the story and update soon!

oh please write more soon! This story is brilliant!

Awe, great chapter. Update soon! :)

i really really love this i cant wait to read the next chapter please update this as soon as you can :)

more please

Update soon