|Reviews for A Father's Love|
| Tbird2290 10/2/12 . chapter 6
First person I've ever met to not demand rewiews! Anyways, awesome story! Continue!
| Anonymous 7/27/12 . chapter 6
I like how you do beastboy the best. Its kinda cute how hes so hyper active. Just a suggestion: if you make any more OCs youmight want to more creative with names. "Rays" and "Daws" are pretty simliar and common for made OCs. I hope to see more.
| Bluesky21543 7/21/12 . chapter 5
Hello! Its me again :) i am so glad that you are not going to make any romance between dalia and one of the established characters because that practically screams mary sue.
Also be careful about following the teen titans episodes because it gets very repetitive after seeing the show. Its okay to start off with but eventually move away from it or add a really differeng twist to it (simply adding your character to an already written script does not qualify as a twist).
I look forward to seeing how you develop you character and story :)
| Bluesky21543 7/12/12 . chapter 4
This is really interesting so far. I dont really like OCs so its your job to convince me otherwise. The idea is very interesting and different from phantom/titans crossover and thats what i like best about this.
To avoid making a mary sue, dont make a love interest that wouldnt work (especially if there is already a canon one). Also include some flaw or weakness in your character.
Your writing could use a bit more detail especially like with emotions. For example, the scene with starfire tearing up the city, i didnt feel any of the panic or severity of the situation until dalias parents got hurt. Overall i think your wriing is pretty good especially for your first story.
I hope some of the random stuff i said helps! Keep writing!
| Guest 7/4/12 . chapter 2
No, that was such an evil cliff-hanger. Your OC isn't too bad, she isn't a Mary Sue (yet) but I hope you develop her character some more. Also, nice style if writing!