Alright, I don't necessarily mean to be rude here, but I just think that if someone is going to post a piece of fiction up for others to read and enjoy (or critique - this IS the internet after all) then that person should at the very least run their words through a spell check and make sure to include any and all appropriate punctuation.

That is all.

It's was good. You should make a sequel or add more chapters. you seem like a good writer who could make a great story.

you should continue this story or make it longer but other then that it is great but i wish you would continue.