Good chapter. Mostly transition stuff but it seems like a lot will be going down in the next one. I really liked how you put some of Cyrus' perspective in this chapter. It certainly helps characterize him a bit. Good luck on the next chapter.

Really interesting chapter, your approach to battles is very interesting. When I read the whole hand to hand combat I was thinking a brawl type approach but this reads more as an all out war. It's very gripping. I see that the sewer level is up next, bet the "resistance" is a trap though. Good luck with the next chapter.

Dang... It sure has been awhile since I've read and reviewed Set Yourself on Fire. These past three days just reading where nice. A lot has happened since then. First of all, Nick. I knew that guy was fishy! *sigh* Its always the cute one who turn out to be utter ( excuse my french) assholes. And Sawyer liking Del, that was not really surprising to me since I've had a hunch. Now I wonder when Sawyer will confess his undying love to her. Also, Dax: it's great to see him. I just love his antics.
The flying scene with everyone in the back was pretty hilarious. And your battles scenes are detailed and very decent, as per usual.
All in all, I cannot wait to see what happens next!

A great start to the invasion. I sure hope poor Cynthia's alright. It's going to be very interesting to see how this progresses as this next segement is going to be quite a departure from your typical writing scenarios. The fact that hand to hand combat will be just as important as pokemon battles is going to be a very interesting element in the next few updates. Good luck with the next chapter!

And so the Unova Arc starts eh?

Oh dear, looking at the chapter here, this arc isn't going to be pretty for them... I can't wait to see what happens next though! Keep up the good work. )

Sheesh, sorry this review is so late. This is really getting interesting now that an invasion is about to happen. So far we've had a lot of character interaction within a friendly safe enviroment, I wonder how a battlefield will affect the frienships between the characters. Really can't wait for the next chapter.

Well, with a reality like that happenning, your 'tardiness' on updating is more than validated, and your logic is sound. I am excited to see how you plan to 'wage war' on the teams, as with Gotta Steal Them All, we have assassins and thieves, with minimal pokemon battles. I've also read a few stories where we basically have pokemon death matches, so my interest on how you run things is high. Anyway, see you next update. Later.

:)

I don't remember how long it's been since I reviewed, but I'm pretty sure that I didn't comment on the last on, which in that case I'm glad i never quite got on the Nick and Malonie train. The fire part was a bit off to me- I'm not really sure if that was necesary- but I digress, most definitely an enjoyable chapter.

Anyway...

DELANEY/SAWYER CONFIRMED?!
In my mind anyway.
So that's how you make your reader's day, congratulations, you win the first prize.
In addition, I was entirely endeared by Steven in there. I have a sort of fetish for sleepy guys, as weird as that sounds. The ones that act strong and tough in particular, it's just always so adorable in my mind. The fact that he has grey hair kinda just makes the picture perfect in my head.
There was kinda lot going on here though? When she came back and saw them all, particularly. You could do with some slow down, some general hellos, no need to rush. otherwise this is most certainly a fun and satisfactory chapter. Though I'm certain what's to come will be very, very enthralling. Waiting on it!

Nice chapter! Can't wait to see where you're going to take the war in Unova. And Sawyer liking Delaney is an interesting development too.

Mmmm...the language certainly has upped itself a notch. The last two chapters have been, I guess, the start of the action, which I don't mind at all, haha. I am a little confused as to why Rhea was so sure that they were going to kill Steven in that battle, but I guess optimism and whatnot.

However, chapter 11(Untamed) did feel a little weaker. The scene where Delaney made up (somewhat) with Jackson was written well, but it just seemed really set up, especially with Atticus' excuse to leave. Not sure what your intention with Dax and Annette is going to be, but this is going to be the first time Delaney sees Dax in person in the present tense, am I right?

Last few lines have certainly set things up well.

Wow, lots of revelation in this chapter as well as a decent battle. I must say, I know you hate writing battling scenes but this one was quite good.

Wow! Didn't see that coming. Well, I saw the Nascence being up to no good coming, but not going directly after Cyrus so soon. I can't wait to see where you take the rest of the story.

Seems like things are really coming to a head. Bet you anything Jackson's going to accidenally set off the Nascence group inadvertently.

Hey there...miss me?! :)

I've been very very busy, but I have been reading each of the new chapters the day they came out. Loving it, I am.

But it's really, really rushed.

I really can't say anything else. With so much going on so fast, there's absolutely no time to keep up with what's going on. I wish I could tell you how to make this better without having to make major changes... so I guess the main thing is to tackle the problems created by it. The main thing, for me, is that it's extremely hard to relate to Delaney through all this. If you can focus on working more of her emotions into light, I think the problem is basically handled.

Honestly, though... For the most part everything is very good! I must say... You continue to keep surprising me...and I actually hold you in very high admiration for the complicated plot you're pulling off here. I am literally dying to see how this unfurls. I read a lot of fanfiction, and you're really pulling into the top tier here, so please keep going!

PS... DAX! And is it true? Do we both share the same first- and second-favorite characters?

PPS...Can I have more Team Sawyer? ;)

Er... yikes. o.o

Well, looks like things are starting to finally pick up here. And it seems you're incorporating a bit of Black 2's plot in here as well. I'm really curious as to how you're going to connect them though. I'm looking forward to it. )