|Reviews for Brink: The Skulls|
| thesalmonskin 7/10/12 . chapter 1
good to see another Brink fic up here. Very good.
You need a bit of grammatical work: you're missing a few commas here and there. Remember that even of it doesn't subscribe to how you imagine someone's word flow, you have to use proper punctuation.
Also you did a bit of gun description there. If you're gonna go into that much, it helps to get familiar with gun mechanics. Gas cartridge? You mean the impingement system? Because bullets don't need gas cartridges to work.
unless they're underwater or in space. Which would be cool.
anyway I'm looking forward to seeing you write some more. Good start, follow it with some good meat on those bones.
| Buddysbud 7/6/12 . chapter 1
Not a bad start, keep it up.