| Reviews for Under Cerulean Skies |
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Legendary Biologist 12/3/12 . chapter 3Hey there! Glad to see that you've updated! Well, this chapter is amusing... I think that the betting is a bit exaggerating lol! Ha, I guess that Fargo is referring to the magnet and casino on Zelbess. Good to know that Guile did appear in the end. The excuses are funny (and true, because in reality, people are always like that, Zoah's excuse is the funniest), and I pity Norris, especially. :) Other than some minor typos in punctuations (commas and semicolons) and articles (some missing 'a' and 'the'), which you can spot with a reread, I do think that Guile's dialect is not as formal as in the game. This is just my opinion, but I think that you can strengthen his 'voice' and/or characterization in his speech. "I didn't know we were playing poker... Can I join?" - I'd suggest: "Never had I thought that you were playing poker... Would you mind if I joined?" "Now then, let's play" - I'd suggest: "Now then, let us start, shall we?" Anyway, I truly enjoyed this chapter, which does mean that you have to update soon! See you later! :) |
Anonymous 12/2/12 . chapter 3 Hahaha, this chapter had me lol'd! Good to see that Guile is no longer OOC! Write more! :D |
Anonymous 11/12/12 . chapter 2 Heheh, that meddlesome Pierre! Kid's reaction is funny too. XD Nicely written with a touch of humor and surprises btw. On a minor note, Guile seemed tobe rather OOC. He is more reserved and calm in the canon. And it is Steena, not Sheena. Anyway, UPDATE! I'll gladly R&R, especially if you give Guile more roles (I'm a Guile fan!). |
Guest 9/28/12 . chapter 1 I like it very much! Looking forward to more chapters... |
HeartsForHire 8/14/12 . chapter 2Awesome. Just awesome. Again, I really do like this story |
Legendary Biologist 8/14/12 . chapter 2Poor Pierre lol! Update it soon... |
Legendary Biologist 7/22/12 . chapter 1It is funny to see characters from fantasy game in college fic, but you wrote it very well nonetheless! Hope you will update it soon. :) |
Flymask44 7/21/12 . chapter 1Oh, this so good...Please update |
HeartsForHire 7/17/12 . chapter 1When I first saw this I thought it sounded ridiculous for the characters from a fantasy game to be going to college. But then I read it. It's so very, very good! |
inamehyuuga 7/15/12 . chapter 1Great writing skills. Flows nicely. You did a good job on keeping characters well in character. I cant wait to see more, I hope you do more. |