I think it would be a good idea if Naudra and Formal had an old friendship that didn't end very well. Possibly, Formal believes Naudra is there to help, while Naudra is there solely on the mission given her by Raina and she carries an old grudge against Formal for whatever reason.

Also, I like this fanfiction. I believe some parts of it could be made better in terms of grammar and details, but you're as much as a professional writer as I am. Keep up the good work :)

as always, i love ur story x)
uhm i never play shaiya but just now i installed it and played it.. And it was so much fun xD
and i have already saw formal willis and julia dillun.. And he's cute :D
pls update ASAP, heise-san

nice idea heise and r u intentionally made the relationship between formal and julia like that? cuz if i remember correctly when i take quest from npc poema she said that formal wills is the lover of julia dillun? srry if my review is only asking cuz im curious

The first piece is good, hinting the future conflicts between them lol keep writing, heise

p.s : i see ur toon once ;)