|Reviews for Elfen MENT|
| Krystal 12/8/12 . chapter 1
ROFL. This is hlarious so far! xD LEROYYYYY JEKINNNNSSSSS! Bwaahahahahahaha. Oh the only mess up is that Bugs Bunny doesn't say the gun thing. :) Elmer Fudd does. I love this so far and seriously you made good points that I noticed like the whole defying gravity with the body thing. xD
| Themulchmeister 9/5/12 . chapter 2
Oh crap. I had the mistakes all highlighted and ready to quote for this review and I bloody lost 'em. Oh screw it, it wasn't really that much considering this chapter was OVER 9000! Anyway. Mainly the spaces after an italicised word seem to be the main issue - but they look unintentional so no worries there.
Looking forward to the next marathon length chapter. Quarterly updates would be ideal, then the readers (if they can only sit through 2000 words worth) can just read it in several instalments. Can't wait to see wether Kouta makes it out of this cliffy with (most) of his dignity intact.
| Guest 9/3/12 . chapter 2
Hello, you should know who this is. Take a guess, go on. Anyway it's your Beta just in case you gave up guessing.
I've only manged to get through about a third of the chapter so far, so I thought I'd be useful and highlight a few little mistakes that would be hard for anyone trying to proofread such a long chapter to find. Anyway I'll shut up and show you them now:
"Isn't it a little early in the yearfor you Jehovah's Witnesses to be doing this?" (space between year and for obviously)
"...I still don'tknow how you survived that by the way." (same deal)
Addressing the JW's- I mean detectives once more, she told the , "Never mind; I think I figured out where she is. Sorry for bothering you, hope you hand out lots of pamphlets!" (unnecessary space between the and ,)
Anyway I'm just up to when Nyu finds herself in a 'drag' so you should hopefully get a proper review soon!
| Winged-panther1 9/1/12 . chapter 2
Please update I wanna see Lucy smack her bitch(Kouta) up when she relizes who he is plus I like the way you made her in this xD
| RachieFly 8/14/12 . chapter 1
Well done! Very well done! I laughed a lot throughout this, it was very funny. It's rare that I come across funny stories like this anymore. Maybe because I don't read that much fan fiction like I used to or maybe not...anyway, great job! Update soon please!
| RidingRetardedPonies 7/18/12 . chapter 1
I just about pissed myself at that "in da choppa" part xD
| OmnifariousDessert 7/13/12 . chapter 1
I don't know where to begin except that this is pure GOLD!
Please keep this going. I also wouldn't mind hearing more about those perverted walls ( they have relatives at the inn maybe ) and while were at it Lucy's melons. What a sight for Bando's precious eyes!
| Arkytal 7/12/12 . chapter 1
Oh my sides! They burn! That was great, I love the Lucy-being-aware-and-being-pissed-a-lot.
Nyucknyucknyucknyuck, I love me the MENT. INfinity MENT is pretty funny too; not as good as I NEED MORE MEAT IN MY DIET, and DAFUQ IS A U.V.A.R.D.
| Themulchmeister 7/11/12 . chapter 1
There is a serious issue with your story sir...There is a dangerous amount of laughs in this chapter!-!-!
For an Abrigdement it turned out quite long didn't it? By the way it might have been caused by the upload or something but I noticed a few words which aren't spaced apart (wherever there's italic text you should find them if it makes it any easier). But then again who cares, it was all hilariawesome anyway! Can't wait for the second episode's release!
| Samedi 7/10/12 . chapter 1
Ha! Priceless, Well done amigo.