great plot... emotional... but lots of annoying typos...

Oooh, boy. Yessiree... Excuse me, but could I borrow that Colt Python you have there and BLOW MY FREAKIN' HEAD OFF!

Damn man, there was too little there for such a large concept, though I'm glad that with an ending like that it was as short as it was. In retrospect it wasn't that bad, it was actually pretty good, especially a certain death scene, but not something I'll ever think fondly of or want to read again. In any case, I'll busy myself with seeing what else you've written and hope that the next thing I read from you has soom happiness to it. Don't get me wrong, darkness is great, but too much with no let-up can spell out a pattern of resistance six feet deep to the as-of-now unwritten...

i thought that was such a great story and if you write more kick butt stories like that someone else is bound to notice. that was awesome and it kept me guessing throughout. the end was a little depressing but it's all in the story. just watch the spelling and that was awesome.

It was sort-of obvious it was her mom, but that's ok. I liked it anyway.