Whoa! That was intnse. Even before this chapter, I was thinking this story had a sort of Walking Dead vibe to it. Pretty cool :)

Wow. Just wow. Not many teens can write such a unique and engaging story like this, even if it is a fan fiction. Your characters are very well-developed and easy for us to relate with and like. I LOVE them! And I admit, I'm a little jealous of how simple and uncomplicated you've made Jen's narrative. It's not wordy or overdone or "explain-y", but we still get a perfect idea of exactly what's going on inside her head. That's something I struggle with a lot. You've definitely found her voice and that's a big, big thing when it comes to character development! Awesome!

And the plot is really cool, I have to say. I've missed reading this, so I'm glad you're done with school and writing it again! Woohoo! I have stuff to read again! :D

Oh yayyyy! I'm so excited to see where this is going to go. It's a really great story and I love it. It's just getting more intersting and intrigueing so good job! Keep it up! :)

Oooh! Nice! I've definitely gotta see what happens. This is just getting better and better! Great job :)

Oh my God, I'm such a jacka**! I didn't even check to see if you had updated since, like, December.

Anyway, on to the important stuff. Right, the vibe I'm getting is Ghostbusters meets The Walking Dead with a dash of X-Men and Percy Jackson thrown in. Now, that might not make sense (I'm part of wayyy too many fandoms), but it's because I'm frustratingly confused (only because I think of myself as relatively intelligent and I can't figure this out) and extremely intrigued. I can't wait to see what happens next.

So glad your back. I'll have to start checking your stuff more regularly again.

-NG

Hey Redcatie,

I haven't looked at your story in a while (bad me, I'm sorry, I'll punish myself later) but you can't just stop there. I absolutely can't stand not knowing where a story is going, and I know trying to write in that position is difficult, but you've piqued my interest. I sincerely hope you finish, but you were right to sit back and take a break if you were stuck.

Hope to see more within the next couple of months. I promise you I will continue reading as long as keep writing.

- NG

Oh, and btw, I love the PKE iPhone app. Brilliant! :D literally made me laugh out loud!

You know what? I'm thinking along the same lines with my own story, so you're not alone. Shoot me a PM if ya need to talk about it! Seriously!

I don't know what happened, but FF whacked out. Anyway, I was skimming through my science notes and found the actual (or close to actual) statistics for DS.

Women 29 or under have approximately a 17% chance of having a child w/ DS.

Women 30-34 have approximately a 25% chance.

Women 35-39 have approximately a 35% chance.

Women 40 have approximately a 40-50% chance.

These statistics are from early 2011, so they may not be 100% accurate, but they're close enough where no one should complain.

I think I know what's going to happen. Going all the way back to 1984 is going to make it difficult. . . I should keep my mouth shut. Anyway, can't wait for more. Sorry for any confusion.
-NG

And now the fun begins!

BTW, I love Mother Time! She exactly the kind of person I would want being in charge of time.

Dude! I love Mother Time! I want her to be my grandma. This was such a funny chapter. I literally had to stop myself from laughing out loud so I wouldn't wake up my toddler.

Very well done! *clap clap clap clap*

:)

Hey! You're writing gets better and better every time you post! I've been pretty impressed with how much you've improved since I read your first story several months back. There are very few missing words now and the writing is cleaner and flows very nicely. It's visible you've been able find your own style/voice and it gives your writing a unique flavor that not many fan fiction writers can boast, especially at your age. I'm pretty picky about the fan fics I read too so I wouldn't say it if I didn't mean it. Your stories are engaging, entertaining and well-written, which is why I've followed them from the beginning.

If you ever need any editing help, or just need an extra pair of eyes to read over your work, I'm always more than willing to offer my services as an "unofficial beta". In the meantime, keep up the good work! :)

-DF