| Reviews for Sailor Moon Shorts |
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Artemis the Moon Maiden 3/22/13 . chapter 5Haha I love it! It's got cuteness, sexy stuff, and centricness all in one! Good job! *clap clap* What if ChibiUsa walked in when they were taking a break...XD she would've been like EWWWW SO THATS WHAT YOU DO WHEN YOU COME IN HERE?! EWW I SIT ON THAT TOO! It's got your sper- ewwwww! So a couple days ago when you two said you had business THIS is what you meant?! AND WHAT HAPPENS AT NIGHT WHEN THE DOOR IS CLOSED?! YOU KNOW, MOST PEOPLE DONT GO TO SLEEP AT 8! and they would be like Err...ChibiUsa, this is just a weird dream! G-go back to bed... Can I request a funny onesided Seiya/Usagi with Usa/Mamo like, what if Seiya had stayed a bit longer when Mamoru came back? |
LoveInTheBattleField 3/21/13 . chapter 5Both chapters are great, keep it coming. |
Luna Goddess of the Night 3/21/13 . chapter 5Some concrit. May I? Your thoughts are italicised, which is good. They're supposed to be italicised. But you don't need the single quotations around them. As for all caps sentences, to show shouting or demanding or whatever. Don't. It hurts the eyes. Instead, you can emphasis it, or keep it normal font, and use words to describe it. Example: "Are you kidding? You didn't even know!" He gaped, shocked and incredulous. Also, if you're truly worried about suggestive themes, how about upping the rating from K to T. T is more for suggestive themes. That way, you'll have a bit more leeway, unless you want to go to M. But you'd have to be careful with M. T would be your best bet at this point in time. Now, the shorts themselves. I could see each of theses becoming their own stories. And I hope you do write them sometime, because those would be cute. Anyways, update soon. -Luna |
LoveInTheBattleField 7/22/12 . chapter 3Great story, keep it coming. |
James Birdsong 7/22/12 . chapter 3 Nice three oneshots. |