|Reviews for As Lucas was on the bed while Helen descended|
| Frenchie121 10/17/12 . chapter 2
OMG don't stop there. Keep going please!
| Frenchie121 10/17/12 . chapter 1
This was a really good chapter. You captured Lucas's emotions perfectly. It was almost like I was reading the actual book.
| anne 8/20/12 . chapter 2
I looooove my Lucas
| AndreggvilJammer 7/23/12 . chapter 2
So yeah; I haven't read Starcrossed, and I'm a bit confused, but it was a nice (relatively short) chapter. I like Orion. xD For some reason, I think he's the funny type of guy, and I like funny guys (you should know where I'm coming from ;) Right?).
You seem to be a bit confused about past and present tense. :) Do you want me to help a bit if you're editing? I would like you to be my first beta-client. Lololol. I've signed up for beta-reading, but don't have a client yet, soooo. :P
Update soon! (Not too soon, or it'll be completed too quickly, and you won't earn as much readers. I speak with experience, because I made this mistake with "Love Story". OTL) :D I MISS YOU. ;w;
| AndreggvilJammer 7/23/12 . chapter 1
One word: good.
Although there are a few grammatical and spelling mistakes (but those could be fixed), it was good. :D You clearly can write well, and I promise you that if you fix up the little punctuations and the grammar, it'd become a pro story that I'm sure will be popular in no time. (Of course, that requires constant updates that are not TOO constant - maybe a chapter with a few days interval)
And I'm honored to give you your first reviews. Yippee! :)) I shall read the next chapter now.
I wish I could update, but I'm procrastinating really badly, and I think I'm too lazy. ;w;
P.S. How's the typhoon? Seriously, tape your windows! It's very dangerous to just leave them like that, ready to break any second.