|Reviews for High School Mermaid|
| snowiewolf 2/23/13 . chapter 6
Please post an ending to this story
| Emma 9/27/12 . chapter 4
okay, again loving the story i think its coming along really nicely, i did love the family the family connection, however, the dads deal is just plain unrealistic and there were so many spelling mistakes i wasn't even funny.
| Emma 9/27/12 . chapter 2
Okay, the story is developing nicely here, but again with the strange in and out of 1st and third person. Also during the opening of Vanessa's bit you call her Jessica, this was a tiny bit confusing. Lastly you also do that strange new instead of knew thing. But other than that the story is really good, and i give the same advice as previous.
| Emma 9/27/12 . chapter 1
Great i idea for a story, i love the integration of the character names as chat names. However there were also a lot of flaws. The story seems quite rushed and could have been built up significantly. At one point you said new instead of knew and there seems to be this strange blurring from 1st to third person. I recommend going through the story and reading it out loud. Then perhaps drawing it out into several chapters.
Anyway i definitely think that you have a great building block, and all you need to do now is extend upon it :) Best of luck.
| IceSk8er19 9/20/12 . chapter 5
awesome :) so cleverly written! :) can't wait for the next update x
| TwilightLover455 9/20/12 . chapter 5
:D really loving this story. can't wait for the next chapter already :D
| TwilightLover455 9/18/12 . chapter 4
Love this story! Please update soon! :)
| Hidd3n-Smil3 9/16/12 . chapter 4
Please continue :) luv this
| IceSk8er19 9/16/12 . chapter 4
YAY! This is getting so good :) thanks for updating quick :) can't wait for the next chapter :) xx
| MermaidsAreReal101 9/15/12 . chapter 4
Quick question. If Ariel just got her voice back, how was she able to talk to Triton before he gave her the drink?
| guest 9/1/12 . chapter 2
love your story.
| IceSk8er19 9/2/12 . chapter 2
OMG! I love it! It's so good! Please finish soon :)
| Guest 8/16/12 . chapter 1
OMG KEEEPPP GOING :D
| MermaidsAreReal101 7/30/12 . chapter 1
Great story so far. Hope it's updated soon.
| MykkLaw 7/25/12 . chapter 1
Grammar and spelling needs a little work. But overall the plot was good. Very original. :)