Bah! It's a good thing I didn't bother to do the sidequests in the town you start in. Wouldda drove me up the wall! The only thing that really bugs me about the game is the WAY over use of the word 'aught'. I'm glad I don't see that much in your story though!

Good chapter and nice way to tie all the sidequests together!

I liked the Strider Class, haven't played Ranger yet. I LOVED the Mystic Archer Class. Trying out the Mystic Knight now. Good chapter, hoping to see more soon. If you want, I can share my pawn with you if you care to, if your on the PS3.

Oh lord, I completely forgot you'd already put that cutscene in! XD Sorry, no I didn't think it's a wrong place at all! I just forgot about it, is all. XD I can't wait for the Everfall bit! That's definitely one of the more intense parts of the early game imo.

And I'm glad you enjoyed Dark Arisen! I caved a while ago and ordered it, but it won't be arriving until late May. But it's good to know that it's a great addition! About it not being DLC, yeah, that really stung for a while. Still, at least they only charged $40 for it, or 30 euros here. I got it for 23 euros though, which is why it's taking so long to arrive hehe. I've read that even really high level players can still have trouble with Bitterblack, so I'm very curious! My only regret is that they changed the main menu theme. XD But oh well!

Ja ne!

Speaking of... you gonna put Dark Arisen on here? Thought I ask first ;P

Well I, for one, certainly enjoyed the first chapter (although some may suggest that I'm biased, I won't have it said!)

I think you've got a great writing style, I really liked the combat scene with the Chimera, and I'll certainly be reading the other chapters you've posted up for this story!

Aww, it's nice to hear that my comments help. I think you handled this very well, though! You certainly expanded a little on the original battle to make it more realistic. And all that blood! o.o I can imagine that Lyria would get covered in the stuff, ew. And I had to laugh at Cal's 'Are you sure?' moment. Like, 'This isn't a good idea. Master told me to tell her when I thought that.' Such a simple, yet refreshing thought process. I love pawns!

Just a question: is Lyria going back to Cassardis for that optional cutscene? I think that would be great exposition. :) If you don't know what I mean, go back to Cassardis once you see the hooded man leaving the Encampment in Cassardis' direction.

Ja ne!

Yes, I was surprised, but happily at that. It's nice to see you're playing Skyrim! I recently started a new playthrough of that myself. I did hear about Dark Arisen, but I was momentarily disappointed (and very, very pissed) by the fact that it will only be shipped with the original game. Still, if the improvements are good enough I may still buy it; I love Dragon's Dogma. 3

By the way, Calsifer's line is awesome: "'Tis almost impressive, the degree to which his ambition outstrips his means," Ooh, that stings. XD Is that one from the game? I can't remember... Poor Valmiro though. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Ja ne!

Aww, it's no problem really. XD I think the issue with Selene and Quina's conversation isn't just the bad dialogue, though; their animations are just off. They keep repeating and stuff...this is how the game handles dialogue, but usually it's not noticeable because other conversations have animations fitting them. I hope that makes sense. XD

Anyway, thanks for the update! Poor Lyria! She's done so much work already and now every freaking villager is asking for her help! Lazy layabouts! But I commend you for making these side quests come in so believably. XD

Ja ne!

This is a wonderful fanfiction. I do hope you continue uploading! My Dragon's Dogma story is a bit tasteless and boring because it doesn't stick to the game's plot. But this is lush and full of detail that I can see happening on my 32 inch with my controller in hand. You pay attention well to the details in the tutorial. Great work!

This was a very nice chapter. :) The descriptions were all very accurate, and you really made the events come alive. One thing I will say is that the dialogue, no matter how much you tried, still remains rather stilted. It's not your fault, obviously; in my mind the 'conversation' between Selene and Quina is one of the worst in the game. It's one of the few I actually dislike.

Ja ne!

Ugh, THAT creep. I didn't actually get this cutscene until my second playthrough (apparently the big obvious hint in neon wasn't enough to deter me from finding a bed first and...yeah) and I love the dialogue in it. So now we're off to find Quina! Love that one.

And I agree with you on the order of things...it never seemed logical to me that Quina's sidequest opens up AFTER the next storyline event. I don't want to spoil too much for those who haven't played the game, but let's just say you would NOT want to keep a decaying monster head in the middle of the encampment just to do side-quests. XD Logically, you might not even find out about Quina's disappearance in that order. o.o

Okay, so the big rant is over now. XD I'll be eagerly awaiting your next update!

Ja ne!

Your welcome _

Can't wait to see what the main pawn looks like xD hmm, I know I shouldn't ask this. But... is there going to be a pairing for Lyria? Don't tell who it is! It will be unfair, for everyone else... :'(

Dang, I guess I'll just have to wait to see who it'll be. XD I prefer Quina myself, but there are A LOT of potential partners in this game... I wonder! The wiki does help a lot with information. They copied the character info from the main website, so it's all fact. What I like about it is that they actually give some back story for your own character and Cassardis in Quina and Adaro's bios.
This was a nice read, it's always interesting to see how well people implement the game's dialogue into a story and I think you did well.

Ja ne!

I like this, I like this a lot. Yeah, chapter 2 was a little too superhero, but there's really no other way to put it considering what happened in the game. *sweatdrop* This looks like a great novelization so far; it has the right balance of detail and dialogue and I think many struggle to get comfortable with that. :)
Quina is in fact the Arisen's childhood friend! Judging from what I read, you must have read the wiki or the character information on the Dragon's Dogma website. The Arisen and Quina were practically raised as siblings later on, I believe, because Adaro took Quina in after she lost her parents, like he did the Arisen.
Out of curiosity, is one of the 'love interests' going to be featured in this story?

Anyway, please update sometime! D

Ja ne!

I like it :-)

It's got originally. And I know what you mean... but, it's pretty clever of you to switch the sword with the long bow! Points for originally on that _