Reviews for A Child's Transgression

phriendly11
2002-06-30
ch 1,

abusedude, this is v. cool. Love the challenge elements done so creatively, and I really wished I had been able to consider it in the running. Love the dreamlike quality of the piece, the use of time passing almost jarringly, very nice. I wish we got a little bit more at the end, but in all, i found it to be extremely nice. Good work, Aire. Nice job.

Kat1
2002-06-30
ch 1,

abuseWow, wow, wow -- now that...um, wow. Though we both know by now how much we differ on style -- this really worked for me, especially how you laced through the prophetic dream, the childhood imaginings with such sharp turns of phrase and brutal realities. The way you described the Will and Syd sex was shivery, the ending was heavy with a strange kind of ambiguity and it was weird how you skimmed over months to pinpoint these moments of clarity. And the end, woah, though I would have appreciated some more specifics -- the end had a strange kind of power. Like he was glad 'Will wouldn't come tumbling after' -- like he was glad he was free of her. After all, the wording isn't 'She was gone. And he he was happy for her.' Simply -- he was happy...this is an interesting take on how rapidly Will could find his independence. Gah! I like!

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