|Reviews for Heart Of Gold|
| classicmovielover 8/20/12 . chapter 13
Yay Pamela and the baby are okay. I hate Tracy. How could she hurt her own baby like that?
"Pamela watched, horrified as Pamela picked up a syringe full of bromide and injected it into her belly, effectively putting her unborn child to sleep." You have Pamela twice in that sentence. The second name should be Tracy. What a chapter!
| LTsangy 8/19/12 . chapter 13
Awww! Boxhall finally made a move (: Yay for them, and keep updating!
| Celtic Ceilidh 8/19/12 . chapter 13
Wow, this chapter is pretty insane and harrowing to read!
I do think there should be a warning at the start, before the chapter itself. There may be readers who are quite sensitive to this sort of subject (those who've had experience of miscarriages, stillbirths, abortions). Adding a warning at the start would be very helpful, so that readers have the choice not to read on, if it will upset them.
I'm not sure if you've had children yourself, but there's one teeny weeny thing I picked up on in the birth scene (I'm a mother of three): the afterbirth doesn't come out at the same time as the child. It's expelled several minutes afterwards - and, to be a little graphic - the cord has to be tugged first, and then you have to push the afterbirth out. It looks pretty much like liver. *shudder* You also forgot to mention the cord itself being cut. But the rest was pretty accurate, description wise. It's good that you used the correct medical terminology.
| classicmovielover 8/17/12 . chapter 11
Oh no, Tracy better not hurt Pam's baby or Pam! I had a feeling Joe would fall for Pam. He seems to care for her, so I'm hoping Pam will survive the abduction without a miscarriage.
| classicmovielover 8/16/12 . chapter 9
Wow. Aww Pam why did you say no to Joe? Silly girl. Haha. Great chapters.
| LTsangy 8/12/12 . chapter 7
Maybe Boxhall will protect her...swoon. I'd be more than happy if he decided to protect me!
I really like stories about the officer's, probably more than I do ones on Jack and Rose. Very good, my dear FanFiction writer. Keep it up and I'll keep reading.
| classicmovielover 8/12/12 . chapter 7
This story is really interesting. I like it. Can't wait to see what will happen next.
| LTsangy 8/4/12 . chapter 6
YAY! Someone else is writing officer fanficts! They are my absolute favorite! I can't wait to read all the others you have planned. But I'm reviewing this one so let me get back on track. I love this story so far! I like how it's after Titanic, and I can definitely feel Boxhall's torment in the beginning when he talks about the other officers who passed away. Violet, erm, Pam, is quite the character ;) Great job, and update again soon! I'll be waiting patiently (for the most part that is :)