I personally love it. And I can't tell you how glad I am that you do your research. I write fiction and draw a lot of inspiration from the past. I can honestly say that I have learned more about history, science, psychology, etc. by writing fiction than I ever did in school (including, sadly, college). As for insane characters, I have only one thing to say: Weird and crazy (to a certain degree) are good things; normal people tend to be rather boring. (No offense to any "normal" people out there). So keep up the good work and update whenever you can! :)

Okay, here is what I have to say after reading 21 chapters today... the girl is just annoying and I don't believe that Finch and Reese would trust her with all so freely, when she is acting as crazy as she does... So said, that the girl is annoying, I guess that's part of why didn't enjoy reading it. I don't know how old you are, but from the way you write, I wouldn't think you're much older than the girl you're writing about? That's no offend, just might be the reason why it seems so unfocused and not thought through well. Well, if you keep on writing, I think you might get better in the future. But critical reviews are important to know what you can do better - and your outburst was too much! A few sentences would have been okay, but as I can tell you don't even consider the reviews well enough, if they don't please you. You even use them like 'if you don't review, I'm not going to update'. You should write a story, because you like it and for no other reason.

I will also admit that your writing style doesn't reach the intelligent way a PoI story needs. But I think it might be the perfect style for animes and youth literature like Harry Potter and Percy Jackson.

So all together - it's not bad, just not good enough for this kind of story. But you shouldn't be angry about it, nobody can be good in every category.

Do not allow critics to deter you from writing a story that you enjoy. Writing, just like any other art form is a learning process and also the creative process and final work is subjective. Did anyone offer to be a beta for you? I'm enjoying your story. I love the dynamics between Daisy, Finch and Reese.

i tried i really did to hang on in this fic as i think it has lots of promise to be great but i think maybe its gone a step to fdar for me, her behaviour is to unpredictable and has no consistency for it to ever be believable for me.

but good luck with it and maybe before you write anymore you should set out a clear path as to where this fic is going so that you are not just throwing things in there that have no meaning and then it will become a much better fic, just think things throw with it dont just write whats in your head that day, have a plan of action as to where you are going with it and follow through on that.

but good luck with the fic, it has potential to be really good, and i hope that my reviews have not offended you in anyway and that they are some help to you. xx

i dont understand how she is a killer when it was laready stated in a previous chapter that she was innocent of those crimes, and yet now she is some highly trained assasin ? if she is so highly trained and so deadly then why could she not better defend herself when those men attacked her ?

like i have been saying their are a lot of inconsistencies within this story - maybe if you planned it out a little more - it would seem less thrown together.

still not quite sure whats going on lol - but it seems to be getting better.

its still a little choppy and doesnt really flow a lot, but it has improved from before.

a little choppy - story kind of seems to be all over the place at the moment, but i can see its improving.

and i dont think that john would ever stand by and see an innocent girl be raped.

looking forward to seeing what happens next.

little confusing with not knowing who jacob is or how anyone knows him.

great job on showing just how bitchy carter is also, i have never liked her character.

loved the fusco/ reese interaction - those two play off each other so well.

finch is awesome in this fic also.

daisy seems cool, cant wait to see more of her.

great to see a POI fic on here - story sounds interesting.

look forward to reading more xx

noooooooooooooo you cant leave it like that more please xxxx