This is a great story with excellent basics for a Takuya x Arisa pairing, not bad at all!

Hey, an Airbats fic! Rock!

Well, this was a pleasant surprise. I'm a big fan of the OAV's, so finding this was really great. Your story was very well written, in particular all the air-techno babble. You definitely made it seem what you knew what you were talking about, making it seem all the more Airbat-ish. ^_^ The budding romance was also very nicely done.

One little suggestion, though. While a lot of people are very fond of dialogue driven stories, they tend to be somewhat bland and flat, taking something away from what could've been there. This story suffers from this somewhat, as you could've brought the emotions out a little more from the characters, making the reader truly feel for them. Scenes happened too quick sometimes, consisting of nothing other than four lines of dialogue and not a single instance of prose. This is totally a personal preference thing, not really a "right" and "wrong" thing, though, as many people would probably prefer to read your story THIS way than the way that I suggested.

But it's just a thought. Again, it's great to see an Airbats fic, and all in all, this was a good story that any AB fan should check out. Hope to see more from you. Thanks for writing it!