Hmm, very original I must say. :D I like the idea of Leafos having to move to another island because of her father's misfortune... This story is very, VERY short though, I first thought this was only the prologue, but apparently it's complete already...
Why not try expanding this plot, I honestly see plenty of opportunity for this story! :D

I'm going to be totally honest here...

I LOVE seeing new Viva Pinata fanfics. Almost nothing makes me happier! But yours is a little too short and the idea isn't developed enough.

But! Your writing quality actually is good, and you're using the human characters, which is fantastic! But you ended this on a loose end, and it's marked as compete, so I was left a little baffled.

You have potential, though! If you wanna keep writing for VP, try expanding your ideas a little bit. I'm sure the results would be great!