|Reviews for After the Battle|
| RekkaKouyuu 4/26/13 . chapter 2
This is wonderful! Please continue. I love me some ryo angst and trooper bonding!
| Marie Kenobi 2/21/13 . chapter 2
It's nearly impossible to find good, well-written YST fanfiction anymore. This is a part of the series that I've always thought had a lot of potential, especially for exploring Ryo's character (who, even after 15 years, still remains my #1 fictional crush). I really hope you continue with it, and I like the thought of putting the boys in our more modern world. I'm looking forward to reading more. :-)
| Zorra Reed 2/8/13 . chapter 2
At the risk of being a hypocrite: Where’s the next update? LOL Loving this story as always. I went back and read it all together, your first chapter still blows me away, but now for different reasons. I paid less attention to the squealing fangirl inside me and more to the sensible part that enjoys a good story. The characterization and conversations you wrote were fantastic and just fell together so perfectly. And your changing from one scene to the next…from Ryo’s inter turmoil to the concerns of the others, very smooth.
In the second chapter the fangirl part of me was a little disappointed not to see more of Ryo’s monster thoughts as the focus. Also, I think I may have accused you of ‘glossing over’ some of the Sarenbo battle by not seizing the opportunity to really dig into the minds of the Warriors…oh admit it…for not transforming the drama into a massive surge of angsty goodness. But I realized that if you had done either of these, the integrity of the story would have been compromised and it just wouldn’t be the same story.
I’m super juiced that there’s going to be another chapter! I personally hope that the second chapter will provide more interest then the second episode did in the series. They had something going and just sort of ran out of time to draw it out…so many questions could have been answered if they’d just written a third part to that set. The more I read the more I want to get inside all their heads. Ryo came to them…Sarenbo didn’t have to search him out….Ryo thinks he’s looking for a fight. What sort of trouble will such thoughts get him into? He’s already as reckless as Shu…but to become more so? You’ve left a lot of openings for other stories to spring from. I love that sort of inspiration!
Moving them up into the 2012 world of technology isn’t a big deal here. It’s passive to the story and so fits in well. You get the desired effects of communication and discovery, and the story still holds true to many things. Plus it gets Mia out of the way, now that Touma can do it all himself. Go Touma! Hope you update very very soon! The plot bunnies are restless!
| Teahleafs 11/18/12 . chapter 2
I am way too lazy to log in haha.
I like where this is going.
I'd break up the paragraphs when you're switching between scenes For example:
Ryo looked out the window in wonder. Where are the guys? they can't have gone far could they? he sighed deeply as he picked up a mug of tea, and begun to stir.
"come on guys, we got to find the evil demon!" Sage promoted the other Ronins.
using the dashes will make it less confusing.
When it comes to the writing, i'd say take your time writing the guys, have fun with it! It felt like you rushed this chapter a bit. It's really coming along, just take your time with the moments of the story.
Good job! :) looking forward to more chapters!
| Stardust2001 8/15/12 . chapter 1
LOVE IT! It's a interesting point of view and bring up alot of the same questions that I had. Like what did happen to them when Aargo(talpa) absorbed them? did the die? Were they just in state of animation? And why was Ryo picked to wear the white armor? Nicely done. Will there be a squeal?
| Zorra Reed 8/14/12 . chapter 1
OMG! This is probably the last story you want to share with a die-hard Ryo fan (me!) Opps, to late, damage done. I can’t begin to tell you how much I love this story! So I’ll just come out and say I LOVE THIS STORY! It could do with some editing here and there, nothing big, but for a thought-driven-sample you did wonderfully. My head is swimming with so many ideas and questions, and what if scenarios…. It’s been a while since I’ve gotten that much of a thrill.
This feels like a one-shot story but I would really like to see you write more, well, a different story that’s a continuation of the same process. I’m curious to see…well, okay, I’m dying to see… the interaction with Sarenbo (I know that’s spelled wrong). I want to know how far Ryo will push himself in this belief of being a monster. I want to know his thoughts and reactions, and that of the others, as the armor is formed against their will the second time.
The subject of the white armor and the episodes between the two great battles – What I personally like to refer to as the intermission episodes – are some of my favorite spots to read fiction about. I’m always up for reading fiction centered around the white armor and its effects, just like you’re doing with this story. So please, you did very well with this story, I implore you to write more like it, you’re so good at doing it!
| TeahLeafs 8/12/12 . chapter 1
Super awesome! :D