Your story is a little too fast pace. I can't imagine Steve reacting to Loki stalking him so easily, unless he'd already had feelings for him prior. You might want to write a chapter in Steve's point of view if you plan to continue. You also tend to describe the characters in a lot of different ways rather than just using their names.. It's not too bad, but I couldn't help pointing that out. Other than that, I quite enjoyed this. If only for adorable!Loki stalking his crush. I couldn't help smiling during the bench scene. v)/