A few spelling errors but aside from that your story is amazing! I hope you finish it soon! I want to know what happens next, you left my hanging at the egde of my seat. I really do hope you add more because there's a lot of stories on here that should be finished and aren't which is devasting, and I wish you story doesnt become one of those stories which is left unfinished and untold.

great story!
update soon plz!


~jess

its really good but I WANNA KEEP READING SO BYE!lol

Work on your spelling. You're also forgetting that Jed became evil. What's the story of the Phoenix? One more thing. Darien's dad was in the car-crash, so Darien couldn't possibly be related.

You need serious help in the spelling department before you write anymore stories. Think of a more original plot!

I enjoyed reading your story. Please update soon!

Great story UPDATE SOON!

Yeah! Who knew? I did. . . Keep writing!

~Pyro

Keep it up! FF.Net sucks at tiumes when posting a story... Update soon!

~pyro

Oh and might I add, you should really be ashamed of yourself. You're a COLLEGE STUDENT for Christs' sake! This is the writing of a 12 year old!

UGH! This is horrendous! Where's the punctuation? There's sentence fragments everywhere and the writing is so choppy. Plus there are spelling errors galore! There's a really nifty tool called 'spellcheck' on word and trust me, it helps a lot.

I mean, look at this sentence:

"Though Raye looked beautiful, she was still the same old Raye he could tell."

This is an english teacher's worst nightmare. Everything about this sentence is so wrong. "He could tell"? There's no point for that, plus it completely breaks the flow.

Look, I highly advise you to either spend some one on one with you english teacher or really pick up a grammar lesson book and study it because this fic is a total mess. I mean, you even forgot to capitalize words after a period!

Continue soon! But, maybe you could actually have paragraphs? That would be good. It would be easier to read. Well, bye! I'll be looking forward to another chapter! And could you read Out of the Blue? It's a Sailor Moon fic and it's my first and no one has reviewed it yet so could you help me out? See ya!

Aw. Darien and Rei are sibs. I always like to know them of being siblings! ^_^ Lovers... no not really. I wonder who the mystery man is... I can't wait to find out! Leave some clues for me in the next chappie, okay? This would be a Scooby Doo Mystery! Go Shaggy!

~Pyro

ha! i knew it. very good chapter, i hope you keep the others coming. keep the good work.
abby

Yay! Great chapter! But you need to have your spelling checked and more paragraphs. Rei's brother is Darien! Rei's brother is Darien! ^-^ No wonder Darien's been having those dreams! Rei's brother is Darien! I can't help but chant that. Rei's brother is Darien! *Laughs at herself* Continue SOON! Please? *Gives Puppy Dog eyes*