|Reviews for IS: The Silent White Rabbit|
| Guest 5/11/13 . chapter 9
Having read the whole thing now i just have one question are he madoka magica sections for refrences sake or do they have some sort of plot significance
| Lord Eruptoren 2/18/13 . chapter 8
Hey i thought you used the knight language perfectly...
I should know my friend payed me fifty bucks to talk like that for a week
| lajoie21 2/1/13 . chapter 9
good chapter. what happen next?
| keizer 2/1/13 . chapter 9
wow what a nice story! Can you make ichika marry with tabane (i want to see what reaction if houki know that) hehehe if like this you can change the rate T to M
| worldwanderer2.0 1/31/13 . chapter 9
REEEHHH?! Setsuka as Ichika's nephew? Wait, that was a speeling error right? Don't you mean Setsuka as Ichika's "niece"? How is that even possible with gap in age difference being really small? An interesting revelation, but it seemed forced or just thrown out there. You could have waited until the big confrontation between Phantom Task, Sarashiki Group, Ichika, Byaku Shiki and friends before you threw that fact out for maximum impact and shock. But oh well, what's done is done. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
And how could Charles not notice something strange or odd with Charlotte and vice-versa? Are they going to wind up dating each other?
Couple of questions I must ask.
Did you borrowed ideas or were you inspired by Fujin of shadows's IS stories when you wrote this chapter? The two clues that lead me to this thought was Setsuka the leader of Phantom Task beng Ichika's niece (and hence a blood relations of his) and Tabane's wet dream about Ichika, since sexually charged scenes involving Ichika has always been a recuring theme in Fujin's IS stories.
Since Setsuka is an Orimura, the assumption would be that that she has to be powerful. But just how powerful is she really, especially if she just 15 years of age? Would she be able to hold her own in a one-on-one fight against Chifuyu? It's hard to know where Setsuka ranks in terms of power among the Orimura family since you didn't give us readers much information about her other than her being the leader of Phantom Task. You gotta give us something here. Just what is it about her that makes her dangerous or insane compared to the other Orimuras? For example, Kana is ruthless and merciless and crazy in her own special and unique way with her desire to shed people's blood, Chifuyu having a seriously sexually charged bro-con obssession with Ichika, and Madoka is just plainly insane and is like an unrestrained version of Chifuyu when it comes to Ichika, and Isane being an apocalyptic unstoppable Goddess of War.
And where's Madoka anyway? She is after all Ichika's biological twin sister, crazy one at best. If Setsuka does have some sort of feelings for Ichika, then just what does Madoka feel for Ichika? Will she make an appearance soon?
I apologise if it feels like I'm unfairly comparing your story of Fujin's. It's just that out of all the other authors writing IS fanfiction, no one goes as far as Fujin in describing and creating the Orimura family and he/she really set the bar high when it comes to fleshing out the Orimura family and bring those characters out...with a full dose of incest and lemons.
Nevertheless, I look forward to the next chapter. I wanna see what sort of chaos you'll have planned for us readers. Are you gonnna use the plot twist idea I suggested back in my review of chapter 5?
| Junky 1/24/13 . chapter 1
One sec, what is Ichiko? A hologram?
| lajoie21 1/7/13 . chapter 8
good chapter. what happen next?
| lajoie21 12/12/12 . chapter 7
good chapter. when the next?
| dijohn 11/21/12 . chapter 1
Why not give him sevral lances each with different abilities i don't khow which but 4 lances sound good so far.
Ideas for lances: Aquarius lance, Lost babel lance[improvement of wht pldn lance], Great tigrex lance, and
Ukanlos Calamity Lance[negative affinity shouldn't count]
Each one should be for a different attribute: speed, power, defense, special( all purpose)
| lajoie21 11/18/12 . chapter 6
good chapter. when the next?
| shin5700 11/12/12 . chapter 5
As I thought in the previous chapter, Ichika should join neither sides as he does not have any reason to them in the first place. It is clearly obvious that both organizations want a pawn and test subject at their disposal which will not give Ichika a life in terms of their intentions. Also, siding with either organizations will give that side an overwhelming advantage that is too much to handle. Lastly, Ichika has no reason to join either organization as he neither loyal to them or has any goals that concedes with theirs. Finally, his loyalty is to his friends and family. Not to suspicious organizations like Phantom Task and Sarashiki Group.
| Nyan-rolled 11/8/12 . chapter 5
I laughed when Chifuyu sexually harassed Maya, then even harder when Maya felt...something awakening inside of her. On another note, darkness isn't exactly an element that can be materialized. Rather it's a natural occurring by product of something light doesn't hit. Why not make Schwarzer Regen have something to do with Magnets?
| Logius Scriba 11/7/12 . chapter 5
| worldwanderer2.0 11/6/12 . chapter 5
Nice chapter you got so far. Keep up the good work.
Ichika should join neither. Both only want him because of his ability to turn IS into actual human beings and is able to communicate with them regradless of whatever form they take, and most likely get all the IS on the other side to turn on their pilots. But don't keep him neutral too long. With Tabane and his IS "sisters" on his side, he can be his own faction to be feared.
Maybe you can do a plot twist where Ichika will slowly but surely start to lean against one side, like say how Phantom Task manipulates a situation where the people Ichika cares about get caught in the crossfire and wind up as collateral damage and Sarashiki Group takes the blame for the incident since Sarashiki's people attacked Byakushiki and her friends and she gets hurt in the process trying to protect them and other students at IS Academy. Ichika won't join Phantom Task, but he will do all he can to hunt down and eliminate the Sarashiki Group for hurting his friends and Phantom Task, taking advantage of the Sarashiki Group's misfortunes, is more than willing to to provide Ichika the necessary intel and to point out targets and persons-of-interest relating to the Sarashiki Group for him to go after. Ichika then assembles and leads army of his IS sisters and wages a war across the world against the Sarashiki faction for hurting Byakushiki and other people he cares about.
Another plot twist would be Kanzashi, who is secretly a spy and traitor to the Sarashiki Group by covertly faked her own kidnapping or death to fully go over to the other side, would serve as Phantom Task's liasion to Ichika's group. Secretly, she has plans of her own and is playing all sides against each other, her first goal being eliminating the Sarashiki Group being lead by Tatenashi.
What do you think?
| Lajoie21 11/6/12 . chapter 5
good chapter. when the next ?