Oh man, I hope we get to see this villain meeting! It'll be neat to see how you write Pester and Dastardos! :D

I love the setting of the rain too, Rose still isn't getting along with the villains, huh? Can't say I blame her; I'd have trust issues if I had a childhood like hers too!

Great work; looking forward to more! :D

Oh man, Mark's leaving now?! Aww, I hope he doesn't go! Right after he and Rose had made up, too!

Hmm, a tiny, pale Pretztail? Poor thing. Hope it's not sick because then Rose will be getting an unpleasant visitor...

Glad Rose is making good gardening progress, though! I hope she works things out with her brother again.

Also, I'm proud of you for writing two chapters in one week! Bravo! :D

Hehe, no worries, even without the help of your friends you did just fine!

Dastardos cameo'd, huh? Oh man, I'm SO EXCITED for him to have a speaking role!

You did a great job describing poor Rose's pain! I always liked the word "matted" to describe hair that was in disarray, blood or not, and you put it to great use! :D

I really liked the description of the garden, too! Excellent work!

Glad Rose apologized to her brother too. How cute, glad to see that their relationship is good...for now!

Awesome job as always; and I'm here if you have any questions, as always! :3

Hey, sorry for not reviewing until now, I've been very busy lately! :

What an amazing chapter! :D Your description skills have really gotten better, wow, there's a world of difference between this one and the first chapter! :D Especially the beginning was perfect, my jaw literally dropped when I read the first few paragraphs! :D

Hm, so Rose was bullied, too? How sad... Glad she had a great friend, though! :D Yet, I feel sorry about her having to miss him now...

Anyway, good job with this chapter, and probs to Silver and Copper too, of course! :D Keep up the amazing work you three!

Don't worry about updating frequently; take all the time you need! Your chapters are worth the wait :D

Oh man, things are getting REALLY dramatic! Poor Rose...I honestly didn't expect her brother to be this much of a jerk, wow! What on Earth would possess him to hit his sister over the head like that?! I hope she's found and taken care of. Rose didn't deserve that. :(

Her backstory is really sad! I hope things get better for her...and I hope her asshole brother gets what's coming to him! I'm wondering who Josh is now...and that guy in the photo...looking forward to more!

Seeing improvement, too. You're lucky you have your friends helping you out! :D

Hm, these new guys are interesting I think! :D I'm wondering why they're cold too, man, are they soured or anyting?

Your description skills are getting better and better, that's great! :D This chapter has a nice length, too, I think, and oh, I feel like I need to mention that I really like chapters that are setted at nighttime! :D

So far, you're improving with every chapter, keep up the good work! :D

Good intro for the two villain boys! :D Nice to get a description of them too; I'm sure they'll shape up to be super interesting!

I love their comment about not wanting to end up like Pester or Dastardos! Great goal for them to have! :P

Keep up the fab work; I'll be looking forward to more! I'm already seeing improvement after only six chapters! Impressive!

Nice chapter, glad to see it's a bit longer and the format looks good too! :D I like Rose, she's had a horrible past, but I hope she'll make a few good friends and will enjoy herself on Piñata Island. The mask shop seems interesting too! :D
Keep up the good work! :D

YES, mask descriptions! They sound great; you put awesome detail into them and I can picture them perfectly in my mind!

Rose is an interesting character; I feel like I said it before but I'm looking forward to learning even more about her! And about that weird happening when she fell...hmm, I have no idea what that could have been!

SUPER excited for more! Keep up the awesome work, Golden!

So, the two siblings were born in a violent household, ey? That's interesting! :D I really liked the flashback, I hope we'll found out more about Mark's and Rose's past and personality as the story advances! :D

You might want to start re-reading your chapters before you upload them, you missed a few capitalizations... It's no big deal, but your story would look more polished if there weren't any sentences like this one in it:

Mark stared at the garden his mouth agape, many emotions sparked in his eyes and his head whipped around to face rose.

Also because there names, without capital letters, mean entirely different things! :P Someone may think you're talking about a flower or a grade or something! :P

Oh my God, I hope the person behind the dead tree is going to be Dastardos... With the reaper involved, things'll be bound to get interesting! :D

Oh wow; I didn't expect for these two to have such a tragic past! D: I really hope their new life on Pinata Island will be MUCH quieter and less chaotic for them. You did an excellent job writing the flashback; it caught me off guard and I think my heart even sped up! Fantastic job!

You did great with the description in general, too, I knew you were worried about that but oh man you had absolutely NO reason to be! :3

Looking forward to seeing how they fare in the Village! And oh-ho-ho-ho, does Mark have an interest in Leafos?

Looking forward to seeing if Rose develops a similar interest in any of the Village fellows! ;)

Keep up the fantastic work! I'm impressed!

it's rlly good i love it keep goin?

Haha, nice chapter, you perfectly showed how Piñata Island can actually be a kinda scary place, during twilight! :P

Your description skills are very good for someone who doesn't have that much experience on the writing front. I think you're talented; keep practicing and you'll be capable of writing AMAZING things, mark my words! :D

Oh man, they encountered a Sour? Not the best first impression, yikes!

Looking forward to seeing what they do with the garden! :D Also looking forward to them receiving masks. I wonder what they'll look like...

Great work! Your chapters are short, but I think that's acceptable since this is your very first fic. You can move on to longer ones whenever you feel that you're ready

Oh, don't worry, I'm not talking about like how long MINE are (my current WIP is over 4000 words, eep!) but over 1000 or something. Take your time, baby steps! :)

Nice story so far, and welcome on FanFiction! :D I see this is your first story - good luck with it! Haha, I think it's going to work out fine: there's a big improvement between the first and the second chapter! Keep it up! :D