I really like it even if it's short; please continue?

Hello, welcome in the VP section, I really like this story's title and summary! I'm sure things will work out to be interesting. :D

You said that you'd appreciate some tips and criticism. Well, maybe it's good to re-read and edit your chapters a little bit before you upload them to prevent typos.

''Dexter HAVE the woman a weird expression'' is supposed to be ''Dexter GAVE the woman a weird expression'', I think. For the rest it's all pretty neat, just a few missed spaces after commas, but I guess that's because you rushed this chapter a bit.

However, I'm looking forward to read more of this story! :D Haha, just take your time with the next chap and you will be fine. :D

Oh wow, ANOTHER new Viva Pinata writer? Three in one week? Oh my goodness, I think God loves me. :'D

That aside, this seems like it can go places! Your writing quality is excellent and so is the formatting! Really looking forward to what else you can dish out! :)

Good luck with the story! You can bet I'll be reading and reviewing every last chapter!