|Reviews for Hear the Bells|
| Unknown 5/3/13 . chapter 1
You did well my friend
| Jardez the Various 4/28/13 . chapter 1
I'm sure your tired of hearing that the chapter was short, but I think the chapter was explained pretty well. I think it's worth checking out. :)
| Grey Wolf4 3/31/13 . chapter 6
This is a great ending to a very good Train/Eve story.
Very well done!
| lilsnuggums 2/18/13 . chapter 5
Wow. This is really good. I really like how this is going, I wouldn't do the whole third person thing though, with you switching pov's already I think it would be too much. I think you should do some more of his teasing and then do a flashback of when train first really fell in love. Like I know about the beginning but really give us full detail. I love the story line already though. The tease was great! Hope to see more. If you don't finish do you think I could adopt this?
| GriffinRose 1/26/13 . chapter 5
For not proofreading this chapter it wasn't that bad. A few mistakes here and there but nothing the rest of us haven't done before. Just pay attention to sentence structure; there were a few places when you used a comma that it should have been a period and vice verse. That will help with the overall flow of the story.
Content wise I thought it was okay. I liked that you had Train teasing Eve; it's so in his character!
I hope you update soon!
| Kanarah J 1/1/13 . chapter 1
Okay, a couple of things: I was very interested by your summary. I think it's a great plot, especially since Eve and Train hilariously didn't get along well in the manga (and it made me kind of sad that you made Eve so OOC since her aversion to Train would have made such a great contrast for this story). Overall, I like the idea.
The execution is where you kind of lost me. Firstly, you said this was going to be written in third person. You actually only wrote about 10 lines in third person, and the rest of it was in first. Just wanted to point that out. Personally, I prefer a third person read, so I was kind of crestfallen when I realized that you were actually writing in first person. I can stomach first person, but I usually dislike it because authors tend to make the mistake of switching POV's half a dozen times per chapter. Rule of thumb, keep one perspective per chapter (if you HAVE to switch it at all). Dividing it up that way not only interrupts the flow of the story, but you end up ruining any connection the reader made with the character during their point of view.
Your grammar was a bit splotchy in places, but your spelling was spot on. Overall, not bad, but the formatting kind of leaves me unsatisfied. :/
| Grey Wolf4 11/14/12 . chapter 3
This is a pretty good Black Cat fic I do like Train/Eve (though I also like Sven/Eve, Train/Saya, Train/Kyoko and Train/Rinslet pairings) but I read this because in the very least I like to think of myself as open minded and this is a pretty good portrayal of Train and Eve in particular.
Even the best can get wounded at times even Train took hits particuarly when taking on the Apostles of the Stars in the manga.
| dark68 10/19/12 . chapter 3
i like it
| darkfairy14 10/15/12 . chapter 3
Hmmm, it seems like an interesting story. A couple of mistakes but nothing too major. I am anticipating more.
| GriffinRose 10/15/12 . chapter 3
Aw! I'm so excited for Eve to find out he's awake!
| GriffinRose 9/21/12 . chapter 2
It may have been short, but if that's all you wanted to cover in this chapter then don't worry about it!
You're action scene here was much better! It didn't feel rushed at all! There were a few grammar/typo errors, but that is easily fixed.
Great chapter and I can't wait for the next one!
| viper's fang 9/20/12 . chapter 2
it was better this time around, so good job on that. there were a few grammar mistakes, like you left out a word, or used the wrong word. for example, you put accepted instead of expected. minor stuff, i'm just nitpicking like i always do. but content wise, story wise, you're doing good. hope you get those ten reviews this time around so we don't have to wait so long next time. ;)
| Guest 9/20/12 . chapter 1
I share your opinion too... I don't actually hate Saya, after all she was the sole reason that Train is what he is after the legend of 'black cat'... Your plot is really good, but I felt that it was a bit rushed... don't take it as criticism, its just my personal opinion... Please upload the next chapter ASAP, I really want to know what actually happened between Eve and the bad guy... Finally TrainXEve fans are resurfacing... Thank goodness! Sorry for my long reviews, its just that I talk a little too much... :-)
| TiffRedd1994 9/18/12 . chapter 1
this is great! Update soon!
| GriffinRose 9/16/12 . chapter 1
I agree that this show deserves a bigger fan base.
As for the story, it seemed rushed. You could have drawn it out a little more. Don't underestimate details, they help make the story. And for action scenes like this, you really just have to imagine that you're there and you're the one moving. Like 'I just blocked with my left arm, what would I do next?' I find that helps me when I write action scenes.
I hope this helps and I hope you update soon!