|Reviews for Universal|
| kaito136 5/12/13 . chapter 13
The end of another chapter. Oh man. Gotta wait again.
| kaito136 4/3/13 . chapter 11
Huh? 9 reviews? Only?
Holy crap this fic is totally one of my favourites now! (Minus the I-am-Sayaka-biased fact). But really. I clicked in here awhile ago, read past 3 chapters very soon and within one sitting infront of my phone, I finished the rest of the chapter.
My butt hurts now but whatever.
And holy cow I swear this is a masterpiece! I dont usually fancy OCs, plus, I love yuri, all sorts of yuri pairing in PMMM are my favourites. But you did a perfect job in characterising Janev and his pairing with Sayaka.
At least I dont hate him like Kyousuke but that's not the point.
The point is this fic is brilliant. The details to the name to the interaction. Sayaka's very much into character too and I totally love how cheeky she is in this story. My English is not so good and at one point you even bothered with explaining tenses of the omni... What. I'm bad in spelling sorry bout that but. Really. It's brilliant.
Just when I thought it will be filled with weird OC, Madoka's frequent appearance reassured me. Then came the chapter of Kyouko, broken, far more broken than how she was like in the anime. I'm really glad to read about the humans who are still alive and Charlotte. That cutie fella is there too.
Each of your chapters has a major cliff hanging, same goes for this chapter. God jeezus please update. It's hard to predict what comes next at all.
Please do not drop this fic. I really love it. It's easily one of my favs I swear. Thanks for producing this story in my favourite character's point of view. All the best! :)
| AKAAkira 11/10/12 . chapter 9
I'm honestly not sure why you bothered with the first chapter's glossary. You explained it all effectively enough, in the next few chapters.
Anyways - Sayaka's narrative is pretty good, nicely witty and well-paced. The scenario is pretty ambitious, and promises a lot of stuff to come - so I hope you'll deliver. Janev is pretty interesting too, and don't seem out of place.
I think getting in this many chapters before moving into the main plot was a tad inadvisable - best to hook readers early, see - but now that it looks like we ARE in the main plot, I guess I can't complain.
| GrygrFlzr 11/4/12 . chapter 9
Seriously, how do you pronounce that? Tkik... Tekiiik... Tkk...
Great plot and storytelling. Your story is so far the only story here that actually follows canon in regards of Madoka's omnipotence (and the fact she can't interfere with things outside of her... 'domain', I suppose).
The part where the Existences don't know what's at the edge of the Universe, is it more Philosophical than Literal? The definition of 'the Universe' means we can't know what's outside of it, after all, but does that apply to the Existences? Can they even reach the 'edge', per se?
And since the Existences are all created through Incubator wishes, there must be a higher being, creator of the Incubators and the Universe?
| Taeniaea 11/3/12 . chapter 9
| Michael S. Repton 9/16/12 . chapter 8
Beautiful reunion scene :) I love your style and your grasp on the characters - Sayaka was always my favourite, and it's very refreshing to get to see more of her. I can't wait to see how this continues!
| Taeniaea 9/16/12 . chapter 8
| Guest 9/6/12 . chapter 7
Nice Story, Keep Writing.
| Sakural7865 9/5/12 . chapter 7
You are very good, your story is very good! You have everyone in character and you use famous girls in history very well! Oh, and I love your OC's, and how they interact with the Puellea Magi cast!
Keep up the good work!
| Frog-kun 8/25/12 . chapter 5
I really liked this. You have Sayaka's POV nailed perfectly. And I really love all the creativity and thought you've put into this. Giant ferrets ftw!
| Sasaki in a Top Hat 8/23/12 . chapter 3
Ooh, I like this. This is pretty interesting, but I always like seeing what people think about when it comes to Magical Girl Heaven. I do have a couple of criticisms, but I am really intruiged and I want to keep reading.
This is a bit of a personal thing, but I never particularly like it when there are characters of equal power and standing to Madoka, even though theoretically it's not impossible to have a few, because I feel it makes Madoka's sacrifice less significant. I do want to see what made the Lord of Sunlit Night so powerful, as Madoka had Homura's timeloops and I don't think innnate ability can make one so strong, magical ferret boy or not (by the way, I am half expecting Yuuno jokes now).
I think you have Sayaka's voice down pretty well, but the story feels a little barren, like she's not narrating as much as she should. Everything feels a little swallowed up in dialogue and the description sounds a little stark. I dunno what it is that feels missing, but... there's just something. I'm not sure.
Sayaka and Joan bro-ing it up in space is a pretty awesome image P The characters seem fine but I'm keeping a wary eye on Janev... He seems fine right now, but I've had enough reading of bad male OCs in this fandom recently to be regarding him coldly. I don't think I need to be worried, but I still am. Make me change my mind! I personally hope everything's going to be platonic, but I can't stop whatever you're planning, so have fun with whatever you're going to do with him.
Well, I'll certainly be keeping my eye on this and I do expect everything will be better and all cleared up in the future.