This was so hard to read/follow. I don't want to sound nasty but there's no punctuation and most of it doesn't make sense. If it wasn't for the fact I couldn't follow what was supposed to be happening I would have probably really enjoyed this.

This is competely unrelated to "Seven Brides For Seven Brothers", it does not belong in this category... there are categories for both "Jonas" and "Hannah Montana", try submitting it as a crossover between the two shows.