sticky and rachel. ugh. that is just nasty. MORE KAYNIE! I love your story and i cannot wait for the next chapter! GOOD JOB! :D

Good ending :) I'm a little sad it wasn't longer, though

please update soon. i like ur writing. if u r going to put some kaynie in the story i would like to kno when. other than that its good but i wish u would write morw in each chapter.

Please, proofread. I think you could catch many of your plentiful grammatical and spelling errors. Also, grammar and spell checking would help. A LOT.

Hm. I liked how you portrayed the original characters, they seem really true to the story. Your writing style seems a little more relaxed, and I like how it fits the pace of the plot. I'm excited to see where you go with this idea of yours, It's really quite intriguing. I hope you continue this story.

I like it, but it seems a bit rushed. I'd like to see what happens though, it's an intriguing idea. Keep updating!

I like it. Update!

Hi! Great job! I find the idea for this story very intriguing, though I feel that you could improve it by fixing a few mechanical errors (things like commas, semi-colons, all the good stuff). I would love it if you continued this! I will be looking forward to it! :)

Glad to make someone happy:)
This chapter was great as well! The cliffhanger was enough to make me want to read more, but not so crazy as to anger me. But perhaps you could consider making the chapters longer?
Also, I'm intersted to know more about Rachel, but I hope you make her own character. I could see it being easy to make her the same as Reynie, or his complete opposite. Somewhere in the middle would be best, I think.

Nice beginning! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
One grammer/spelling note. In the author's note you should have written "you're" instead of "your" because you were contracting.