Was good some grammatical errors but nothing that took away from the end result. Look forward to reading on keep up the good work the more you write the better you get and you have talent.

Wow, that was a fast couple of updates. Loved the ending; so sweet! :D

ich finde die geschichte toll
und Will ist ein arsch
ich hoffe für die zwei mädels geht es gut aus
schreib bitte schnell weiter

O.o Such a cliffhanger! Please update again soon, and don't let it be Sharon who gets shot. :(