You're a sick writer, great story but can you lay of the swears a bit? In the show they don't swear as much

You bastard. I swear to god if you make Clay walk off i will turn time back and force you to not have it that way. Your story. Is. Legend. Honestly if you wanted to you could probay make this into a screenplay and sell it to the producers. I think that it would be beneficial to you if you put more of Manny, Mitchell ,luke , Gloria and Jay into this but thats just my opinion.
My heart warmed when Clay was slapped... How many times have ya heard that? Honestly though i think that Clay is a good thing for Haley and that she's become smarter with him. Maybe Alex and Haley could have more in depth convos.
Someone, Haley preferably Bitch slap claire. Shes just gotta be knocked down a peg or two. Maybe you could have all Pro-Clay family members arrange like a intervention thing... Yeah an intervention for being a bitch. Also Clay and Haley should get out of the house a while maybe go down to the peir or something. Keep writing.
You're awesome, im out. Pace du tú.

Great chapter. It really shows all the feelings that Haley and Clay have for each other. Thank god that Dlyan left. I was so sick and tired of that...beep. Okay. I'm not going to cuss. Anyway, good job. I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the fantastic work!

Oh, you go, Alex!
Good job on this chapter. I wonder why Claire seems so happy about Dylan...
OH NO! She better not be... oh, what the heck? I'll just read the next chapter. Keep up the good work!

Aww! How sweet...and upsetting...and exciting! Ah! This story is messing with my emotions! Anyway, good job!

Hi just want to say I cried,laughed AND SCREAMED when I saw your comment on my review thanks for taking time to read it and rereview and your right it would be a bit dark for the tv show thanks for updating and you must finish this story! Anyway i just want to say you are great at writing and I will update this story until the new chapter comes out
Ps thanks for updating the story early and dude this is the best story I have ever read.

Eshhh. Claire is really grating on my nerves... Poor Clay.

I'm still pretty mad at Claire, but I do see where she's coming from. Poor Clay, though...she's being too hard on him. Update soon!

Wow I loved this I cried and laughed dude u r great at writing
How cool would it be if one of the writers read this and used the story line
And loved the way u ended the chapter

YOU BASTARD! FUCKING CLIFFHANGERING CUNT BAG! Calm ODA be calm. Sorry. Whooo. Fallout. You are officially the best writer i know that i repeat with consistancy... I knew you'd ansewer my prayers. Eventually. Holy crap. I didnt think that we'd see exes soo soon! Do us all a favor and dont soap opera it for us. That would just be bad. No crazy twists and turns man. My heart doesnt need that. Yes i am a man and yes i do enjoy a good solid. Meh romance peice but would you try your hand at... Dare i say it... Fluff. Just something to warm the heart ya know? I think you'd be purty good at it. And i swear to god if you take a month to update and that update is short. I swear i will find you and kill you. I go on FF everynight 10:30 and check for more of this. Oh did i tell you? 2 miricales happend today! Fallout updated and he gave Clay a personality!? Dufuq? My input(?) is that i think Clay and this little shitbag fun dip sex addict Jimmy should have a little talk where Clay throws Jimmy on the ground so hard the San Andreas fault shifts. Also would you please have Haley smack that bitch of a mom, please!? She's pushing it. And i'd like to see Haley's pregnantial snap as it were. I swear to god if you die before you can finish this story i will revive you and force you to finish this work. Sorry 'bout all the cursing. (NO MORE CLIFFIES) Singing out "The wand chooses the wizard. And the story chooses the Author. Take heed my honorary Nerd freind. And write on!

Ahhhh! I love it! Can't wait to find put what happens!

OMG! Update ASAP

No way! She brought Dylan? Claire Mama is being mean... Nice one!

Great chapter as usual :) can't wait to see how this unfolds !

Your damn right I would have wished death on you! But i didn't ...not yet...that's your warning to keep us upto date!MORE!