Nice one! I just LOVE jily fanfics!

This is really great :)

this is so cute, keep up the awesomeness!

I really loved this.
The fire hair was a fantastic simile.

This gave me chills. Seriously I love your writing.

Just a couple of little points - a missing capital and speech mark where the only errors I spotted, and - I don't know if this is me being petty - I...in canon (Snape's Worst Memory), James can't even bring himself to say the word Mudblood ("I'd never call you a - you-know-what!") but here he says it twice. I'm not exactly sure of the time setting of your story but I don't think his beliefs would have changed that much. Just my two pennies worth.

There should be more reviews. I like your writing style and the plot of this story. The way its written, even though its amazing as a oneshot, almost makes me want more. Oh goodness, I'm becoming spoiled ;) But this really is fantastic.

really dramatic and emotional but very good - enjoyed reading :)

Aww... 3

This is really sweet but also harsh and raw. It's so emotional. Great work!