|Reviews for The Snare of Darkness|
| TearfulFriend18 6/10/13 . chapter 14
Wow, Frost? Oh Nexus you ol' coot. Great chapter, i love how you show the tensions between everyone, I can already tell that this is NOT going to be fun for either of them. I'm curious, does Tyrannica know that Nexus and Spyro are in Warfang? Or is she just biding her time?
| Guest 5/29/13 . chapter 14
| Negative Infraction 5/28/13 . chapter 14
I take it that Flash and his buddy are still watching the proceedings like hawks. I'm interested how they'll react to the way Spyro's treating Nexus, and the resulting wraiths that he demonstrated.
And I am loving the tension Nexus brings, especially between him and Spyro. It's a lovely subversion of "Hey, we need him even though he's killed hundreds of people, so we'll give him a VIP pass!" archetype that seems to follow so many other fanfics.
| The1upguy 5/25/13 . chapter 14
In a single word...AWESOME! I do love Nexus, and his attitude. A powerful dragon that knows he is, and now he's showing his talents...AWESOME.
Please don't get another virus, and update soon.
| Solaro the watcher 5/25/13 . chapter 14
Solaro was slightly surprised that the Guardians had granted Nexus as much as they had, but he didn't think much on it; they needed Nexus, regardless of how much he hated him.
Like everyone in the chamber, the gold dragon also would have been reluctant to allow the purple dragon to use the Training Room, even for a demonstration, but he knew that they needed Nexus just as much as he needed them; Solaro could sense no lie in his words - he would not try to enter his mind again, he had learned that lesson in the cell the other day.
On the way to the Training Room, Nexus' head shot up. Solaro had heard the sound too: like talons scraping against stone in the direction of the open windows...
Cynder's cold voice cut them both from their trances, and they continued onward, though Solaro kept the sound in the back of his mind...what had it been...?
During the demonstration of the wraiths, Solaro noticed just how hard Nexus had to fight; he wasn't having the wraith dummies pull a single punch, and was letting them fight at their full strength, going for killing blows.
"He's actually putting his llfe at risk here..."
At the end of the battle, he was more worn out than he had been in the fight in the mountains.
Then rose the issue of Nexus' new sleeping quarters, for he outright refused to return to the dungeon and threatened to leave unless he got somewhere else to sleep.
"He can stay with me," Spyro spoke up. Everyone - even Solaro - was utterly surprised by this. After the purple dragon explained his reasoning, however, Solaro eased up on his worries.
"At least, this way, we can keep a closer eye on him..."
(My two biggest issues are as follows:
-Flash has seen Nexus in the Temple; how much did he overhear? What will he do? How will it hinder Nexus' "assistance" in the fight? And who, if anyone, will he tell?
-What was the sound that Nexus heard in the corridor? Could it be the pheonix? Or was it Flash following them? [my guess: Flash]
(Great chapter! Good to see Nexus trying to help them out - albeit for self-preservational reasons.
And I will be waiting for another great chapter! See ya!)
| Torchie1 5/25/13 . chapter 14
Wow, it had been a while since we've been in Nexus' head and I gotta say I am really enjoying it. :) Nexus, as a character, is just so awesome! You made us hate him, you made us like him, and now just the way he thinks and his unconcerned way of doing things are just so...amusing. I've must state that as a writer, you have developed his character extremely well. :D
The chapter was, again, great, so I really don't have anything new to say that I haven't in the previous chapters.
Can't wait until the next chapter. :)
| coincidencless 5/24/13 . chapter 14
'Frost' Yep, pretty forgettable. That'll work. Except for the fact that Flash, whose brother he /killed/, just saw everything. Oh yeah, this is gonna be fun. Speaking of Flash...
'Until we can find some kind of weakness to exploit' Light element versus shadow creature! How did I not think of that before? Or did I, and I just can't remember? Oh well; in either case, I can see Flash being very, very powerful against the wraiths.
Like always, a wonderful chapter. Eager for more!
| Solaro the watcher 4/23/13 . chapter 13
Solaro could feel the aura of pure hatred eminating from Cynder. Her memories of the attack on Warfang only six months before were flooding back into her - and Solaro's - mind. He couldn't believe that they were allowing Nexus - the dragon who turned Spyro and Cynder's lives upside down, who had left Spyro scarred, both physically and emotionally - to come waltzing into the city!
Unfortunately, the points he made when the Guardians questioned him were too glaringly true to simply resort to executing the purple dragon on the spot - which, despite his calm and collected nature, Solaro would have preferred.
The next morning, Solaro followed Spyro to the city's dungeons - which he had to agree with Spyro's thoughts that he expected them to be a little less...empty - and to Nexus's cell, finding it heavily guarded and the purple dragon simply playing around with his chameleon-like powers. As expected, Spyro had come to ask his 'brother' a few questions...including if he really was Nexus's brother.
At this, Solaro decided to try and look into the purple dragon's mind, searching for answers. However, the moment their minds came into contact, Nexus threw a blast of mental power, sending the gold dragon spinning out of control, his spectral body passing unhindered through the wall.
He managed to regain control by the time he came outside, but he was forced to the ground by a great power pressing against him mind. The pressure released with Nexus's voice echoing in his head: "Keep your nose out of where it doesn't belong for a change, will you?"
Solaro regathered his thoughts, but then looked back into the dungeon.
"...he knew I was there...the whole time..."
(Sorry it took so long to get this review in; homework.
(And more intensity to the suspence! You sure know how to keep an audience interested! [...I think I've mentioned that sometime before...]
(Alright, and now we wait. Hope the next chapter's as awsome as you always do!)
| TearfulFriend18 4/23/13 . chapter 13
Ooooooooooo The mystery deepens. What can we expect next chapter? I don't know but it'll be awesome! Great chapter, Nexus is devious as always, what else could make this day any better? Re-reading The Broken Line of course :D
| Torchie1 4/21/13 . chapter 13
Just, amazing. Nope, nothing else.
| Feanor the Dragon 4/21/13 . chapter 13
Uh-oh... I thought Cynder would be Nexus's biggest worry, but he should be much more worried about Flash. I foresee conflict! :D
...Aaanywho... geeze, it's been for-EVER since I last reviewed. Sorry about that.
Nexus is oddly calm, which is awesome. I like how his serenity is getting at Spyro. It's so much fun to see the way Nexus acts... a little different than I imagined it (i.e.: fewer chokeholds and stranglings...) but his long-awaited return to the Dragon Realms was most certainly worth the wait! As always, epicness abounds in your writing!
Chinook is starting to become my favorite character. "Fancy meeting you here." Smooooth, Chinook... real smooth. XD
You've been turning out chapters pretty fast lately; which is great! ...There were, however, one typo that I think I ought to point out.
"With a sigh, the purple dragon pulled open the door and exited his rom." I think you meant "room." I wouldn't mention it, but it jolted me out of the story a little bit and made me do a double-take.
Another thing I noticed was that you have a lot of places that are like this: "Sorry guys, but you're just going to have to wait," she said grimly. Then, without giving them a chance to reply, she moved off to intercept the approaching group.
What I mean is, that you have a lot of places where you have a quotation and the 'he/she said' phrase, and immediately after that, you begin the next sentence with the word "Then." If you removed the "Then" for some of those, I think it would flow a little more smoothly. "Then" tends to break up the narrative rather than transition it sometimes.
...But, that's just a matter of opinion.
As to the last few chapters... Sky Haven -the place, the characters, and the events- was wonderful! Especially the phoenix. Nice touch with that! I would like to say, though, about the mural, that (a) the purple dragon could be Nexus or a re-made-young (whatever the word for that is) Ragnor... or even Tyrannica, rather than Spyro; and (b) It seems like the dragon in the mural could be fighting against the worlds destruction rather than bringing it about. I guess it's one of those times when the interpretation of it is all about the context.
...Sort of like how "I'm sorry," and "I apologize," mean the same thing... unless you're at a funeral.
Lot's of conspiracy to chew on... you made us like Nexus, as impossible as it seemed it would be... Which must mean that you're about to start throwing huge trials and tribulations at him.
I look forward to what is coming! Keep up the awesomeness, DragonMaster!
While I yet tarry in Sane,
Feanor the Dragon
| flippinUrtables 4/21/13 . chapter 13
This story and its prequel are amongst the best I've ever read. Not gonna lie, I think that this surpasses even some of the best authors who publish stuff. Please update soon, I can't wait to see wht happens now.
| Torchie1 4/21/13 . chapter 12
Yeah, Nexus is finally back. :) I've been hoping he would return soon.
I really don't want to waste you time telling you how great this chapter is, because I would be repeating myself. But, what the heck, awesome chapter! x)
| marsh166 4/20/13 . chapter 13
Sorry I didn't review the last chapter I accidently missed you posting it.
Anyways... Yay! Nexus is back! I can't wait to see the next chapter, and how this is going to flow out. I can't help but wonder exactly what Tyrannica ran away from. I hope you reveal that soon as well.
Keep at it!
| Necron Dragon Lord of D.A 4/20/13 . chapter 13
Flash will reach worse than cynder...his brother was killed bause of him :/
and i agreed with .chaos97 here, Nex is cunning. I feel he will know 2 watcher not invited will be there, and after the meeting he will point the uninvited guests XD