|Reviews for A Bright Day|
| luffyluffy 9/7/12 . chapter 1
Good good, but a few logistical problems regarding Bright. His personality is perfect, but you can remove the 'bright smiled er brightly' thing and just make it 'bright smiled brightly' because amusingly, it works.
Also, feddie collars are stiff and don't turn up. Other than thatm, great job yo!