|Reviews for Mai real life|
| SyfyGeek13 4/13/13 . chapter 6
I loved Chloe's tease texting! So hilarious! She admitted she has feelings for Alek...dun dun dun! Can't wait to see more!
| iWant9Lives2Live 4/13/13 . chapter 6
Awwwww Alek is so caring ;) update xD
| Lilianna.S 4/13/13 . chapter 4
I really liked this story! But i would like to give you an honest review, one that may or may not help you become a better writer.
Things i liked:
I liked how Chloe was responsible enough to say no to Brian. (not just because i dont like him)
I also liked that it was like giving Alek/Chloe another chance under different and i'd say more respectable situations.
Ways to make this story better:
(I am a Nine Lives fanfiction writer too, and i understand when people comment or review and tell you what you need to change, does help but also kind of hurts. I am not writng this to hurt you, i am writing this because i feel your story is great right now, and could even more great if i gave you some minor points)
Your dialogue is intreasting to read, and for the most part realistic in what we as real people would say. But before uploading the chapter, take your time to reread the dialogue and see if it sounds boxy/unrealistic. See if you'd say those things like that.
I love your dialogue i really do, but too much or not enough can become boreing. Sometimes you need to(most of the time) add discripitons of whats going on around them. What is Chloe thinking. How she feels. What she sees.
Lastly you dont always have to give us all the information. Most readers will say "Oh i want to know what she was going to say or whats happening". But when you give us all the information its ether to much to handle or it makes the reader bored and just want some funny scenes with Chalek.
I didnt write this reveiw to hate. NO i love this story. I really do. I wrote this review to help you, to make you reach your full poteintal one that i know you can.
- Fellow Fanfic writer, and Chalek lover. (:
| Erudessa-gabrielle 3/16/13 . chapter 5
| 1241070 1/11/13 . chapter 5
| Guest 11/2/12 . chapter 4
Update! I'm begging!
| kaitlyn99 11/4/12 . chapter 4
Loved it! Update soon!
| iWant9Lives2Live 11/2/12 . chapter 4
| SyfyGeek13 11/2/12 . chapter 4
Loved Chloe's joke at the end! x) I'm glad your going to start updating these again, I missed your stories!
| Guest 10/28/12 . chapter 3
PLEASE WRITE MORE IT'S REALLY GOOOOOOOOOOOOODDD AND ADICTING:)
| panaricanchick 10/20/12 . chapter 3
And the plot thickens. Interesting. Glad to see she didn't die.
| Guest 10/16/12 . chapter 3
Please update! I hope Chalek gets together after he finds out she's Mai; but then again I hope she makes him jealous... I think the story's starting off amazing (:
| Kerriegirl22 10/11/12 . chapter 3
Tht was great right another
| Guest 9/22/12 . chapter 3
| Emilyjayden101 9/24/12 . chapter 3
Yey, they found each other is Mai. I love the conversation alek had with jasmine, that was hilarious. Its so cute that alek likes chloe and chloe like him. Can't wait to see where you lead this next and how They react to finding out each other to Mai. Update more super soon please! :D