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Please continue to update this story! It has SO MUCH potential! I just finished the game and fell in love with it :D

Please continue to u

I love the fact that you dislike Megan. I also dislike her.
Keep up the excellent work

This story is amaaazing. Please continue!

The story is coming along nicely. I cant wait to read more.

More please! I really like your style of writing, especially speech. It comes across so natural. :)

I don't like Megan either, but I am loving this story and even though I'm a fan of Adam/Malik; Elizabeth is a really cool girl so far, she's very cute. I can't wait to see how this whole 'babysitting' assignment goes. :)

Good chapter, maybe it's because there's more explanation and description than in the first but i find it better structured and less confusing. Nice work. :)

Yay, another chapter! Poor Elizabeth, being used like Jensen was. Looking forward to more! :)

So far, so good. I'm interested to see how you make this whole shtick work out ! A criticism would be in order. 1. You didn't give much background to the aftermath of the whole moral dilemma in the Human Revolution world. How did it go ? What message was shown to the world to see ? 2. Add more detail to newcomers like the Elizabeth gal. Done for now. I hope to see what happens next ! Update soon !

Ultra commands you to continue the story puny mortal.

Please?

Seems interesting eventhough there are some part a bit too fast (where does Taggart comes ? And why him, opposant to Sarif, and not Hugh Darrow who was David Sarif's friend and mentor among other things) and a few thing that seem "unrealistic" : distance between Detroit and Singapour is 9380.95 Miles 15096.76 Km which means several HOURS for an one way flight so for a way and back refill the VTOL you can guess how long it would be. Locating phone call is nothing new today so why should it be to Pritchard ? Finally, what does Elizabeth's augmentations have to do with her competencies to work as secretary appart nothing ? ;)

Don't take it wrong, i like your plot but there are things that have me gritting my teeth. And a few explanation in the summary are not enough to explain gapes. You may want to developp a bit more instead of jumping ahead (we're not in your head knowing all the details. ;)

Wish you courage to continue this story. :)

Hey, I really like this so far. I think it could get really interesting.
Only thing, you might remove the "Paste your document here..." at the end of the chapter.
Looking forward to more! :)