Loving your story mate but will be honest the last chapter seemed rushed and not at all up to your previous standard but i am sure you would do better in the next one. Need I say the proper entry of one Harry Dresden eagerly awaited by all reveiwers and followers. Hope you have a decent reason for him not meeting maggie , nothing like i wanted to keep you safe.

I'm glad to see a new chapter! It was short, but one step forward is better than none. :-)

I can't wait for the next chapter.

keep writine please? really good story line

Okay, amazing little fic here. Well written and definitely enjoyable.

looks aswome soo far

cant wait for more

Interesting and well written story. I will keep an eye on it.

cant wait for the next chapter

THIS STORY! HHHHHHHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN NNNNNNGGGGGGGGG! Its awesome and the kind of mystery story about maggies origins ive been waiting for! All it needs now is for her or her pops to burn down a building! (ps - read Cold Days its awesome and I simply view tihs as AU after Ghost Story so the continuity fairy in my head doesnt run me through with iron)

Wow, this is a great story. It flows really well and it seems to be in character with how I thought Harry's daughter would act. And all of the other characters aren't too far from what I imagine they'd be like as Maggie reached that age.

I only have two criticisms. Try to use more contractions. It's difficult to read when your brain automatically wants to think the contraction instead of the two words. Also, you might want to get a proofreader. There are hardly any misspelled words, but there a several grammatical errors. They don't detract from the story at all though. The story definitely transcends any errors I've seen.

I wish I could tell a story this well! Keep up the great work!

Great start, I really like how you write Maggie. I can't wait to see where this goes next.

Fascinating premise.

dead set against us not being together-dead set against us being together

Mom wasn't too happen-Mom wasn't too happy

Please look into commas and run-on sentences. Plenty of help online.

I really like this story, just wish we'd finally get to read about Harry! Gawd can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you!

Cracking good start to a tale. I do wonder why maggies family is messing with her head so much but all in good time. What is the deal with Jessica? I first thought she was a Raith watching out for Thomas's neice but that is ashes now

Wow just finished reading all 4 chapters and I a few things to say.
1. Jessica is super creepy
2. You should put up chapter 5
3. Molly married Carlos?! (why?)