Pretty good chapter, kinda scary, but good.

Keep up the work and I will continue to follow :)

Really adorable how they mutually declared their undying love for each other.

Simply amazing :D

Wow, great first chapter.

I'm impressed. Lots of emotions :)

* follows *

KYAAAAAAAAA
HAHAHA THANK YOU FOR WRITING THIS XDD
LOVE THIS CHAP
WONDERFUL!3

Cool! Write more!

Love it! Keep posting!

Scary! And awesome! keep it up!

Well I think you did very well with the possession scene in the chapter. I'm looking forward to further developments.

Oh, please write more!

Hi! Well, first of all, I just wanted to tell you that your story is amazing. I think your writing is really good and I'm glad that I found this story one day. I've been reading it since you uploaded the first chapter! I'm sorry for not writing a review before, I wanted to but I'm just... shy. But since I know how much one review can encourage someone, here I am. I've been in your "position" too, not here in fanfiction but yes. I've been writing for years, I want to be an author too, and I know how it feels to put so much effort and so much time in a story and having few reviews, and how if feels to have some more reviews too. I know how sad or frustrated you can be, or, on the other hand, how happy you can be. I've read somewhere that you're a bit sad because you don't have many reviews yet (or because some people stopped reading the story or something like that), so that's why I'm here :) I think that you're really skilled at writing, and that your stories deserve LOTS of reviews and LOTS of readers. I've read this one and "Holding Hands" too, and I loved them both. I could go on and on telling you how much I love them and how much I like your writing, but that would be too long lol.

About this chapter, I just... LOVED it. From beginning to end. But I have to say, that the moment when Kazehaya embraced Sawako, cried, called her by her first name, and confessed... Killed me. I wasn't expecting that, and it really touched my heart. If I had to say just one thing that I don't like very much (not about this chapter, but about the story in general) I would say that I don't like very much the fact that Shino likes Kazehaya too, being Sawako's best friend from childhood... But that's just a thought, I love the story either way and I'm expectant for the next chapter! :)

I hope that wasn't too long, and that I helped you a bit...

Greetings,

Cris

P.D.: I'm sorry if I made any mistakes, English is not my first language...

Holy Crap! This was amazing! You've really outdone yourself this time. Just call me Nai, if you want. I can't wait for the next chapter.

First of all I want to say I am enjoying your story and looking forward to more of it.

Now, let me address a big concern I have. The end of the fourth chapter is confusing to me. I’m going to guess that it is a memory since the two sections are in Italics, but since they are approaching a bridge, I’m not 100% sure. I’m going to guess that the person thinking/remembering this is Sawako. If so, maybe you could say something in the first line like; ‘As they approached the bridge a memory came to Sawako’s mind.’

The girl on the bridge is my next concern. At first I thought the girl was several years younger than the person having the memory. It finally hit me on the third read through this might be Shino. I think you could clear this up also by adding into the last line, “My name is Shino, what’s yours?” or something to that effect.

I think you are a very good writer and I’m not seeing spelling and grammar errors. We as writers sometimes run a scene through our heads so many times trying to get it right, we leave a description out because we would swear it was in there, and it was in our mind. I have been guilty of this myself.

Anyway, please take this as advice not criticism and keep up the good work.

This chapter was great! thanks for the shout out :)

I like Shino! Awesome character who is there for Sawako! - It's sweet